About You

sorta erotica i guess it was originally a diary entry on my live journal account but i decided to try to turn it into a poem

Lying next to him, 

hearing his heart beat.

looking in his gaze makes me feel so complete

 I love it when he looks in my eyes. 

His eyes shine so bright,

 the color takes my breath away.

my mind loses the fight

I love being so close to him 

me and him the perfect scene

His touch makes my body tingle.

and his kiss drives me crazy

 When our bodys touch my heart jumps with excitement.

 Everything about him brings me bliss 

 When he strokes my face 

rubs my body

when he kisses my lips

when he  grabs my waist

i can feel the lightening flowing within me

 electric waves flowing through my blood veins

I love his hands on my body

Author's Note

yeah i dont think its that good but hey i tried

Reviews

[Breezie Kae]

I love this! Great job. :)

[Tia Sanchez]

Passionate erotic poetry. Right up my alley. Beautiful.

[Chassitie Linnaea Nicol..]

its about my man james

[TadKent]

electrifying, but tender. Love it! Who's this about, if you don't mind me asking? It's pretty personal...haha.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is sweet and beautiful. It is very soft erotic poetry. I believe this is the best kind. Allow the reader to image great things. The poem flow is very good and you told a very good story. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[KatiePie]

"my mind loses the fight"
and
"i can feel the lightening flowing within me
electric waves flowing through my blood veins"

I really enjoyed reading this ^-^
I got a very good visual also, and it did not feel like I was reading a million details, so it wasn't draining, Iike it.
Good work