Sunset 9.21

Exists in video here http://youtu.be/ahFNKGaHMBs

this is what I will tell you
we’re in a building
it’s on fire
we’ve made friends
held hands
played puppy love
peeling the skin
onion fields
raw deal
i’m not crying.
my stick is yours
we’re just kids
closet doors shut
keep the moths away
dogged sweater
sings lullaby
goodnight
nevermind the condition
tell me this will not last
spider’s silk
my pillow
won’t follow when you are gone
may flower
autumn leaves
I am wide awake
veins pumping
exhaust
wave caution
kiss me

Reviews

[LJW]

Unique.

Staccato glimpses of moments/interior and exterior.

I appreciate the ORIGINALITY.

[E.C.F. Doyle]

Very enjoyable read. Great pace and imagery.

"peeling the skin
onion fields
raw deal"

Lovely stuff. Good write.

[Em]

I liked this, I loved the way you wrote it. It made a picture in my head. You're writing style is great. I think I'll read some more of your work.

[CharlyeMonroe]

Thank you both, I really appreciate it.

[Michael X]

An abstract realm of poetry that captures nostalgic intentions, enjoyable read!

[TJ]

Wow, you have such an interesting writing style! I really enjoyed reading it. It evokes such beautiful imagery...
Thankyou.