The One...

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I wish to ignore the noisy confusion of the stars,
To flounder in the depths of his universe, unnoticed;
To taste the tears on my lover's lips,
and lick the salt of his sorrow...
To give strength to the walls of devotion,
and beat strong in my lover's heart...

~A thousand times bursting~
I will be the one to steal his breath...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Short & sweet, this lovers poem is perfect for Valentines day. I especially like that this sounds unique, not like the other ten million love poems. I read sorrow & love intertwined here. Very nice imagery.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and beautiful use of words.
"~A thousand times bursting~
I will be the one to steal his breath..."
I liked the above lines a lot. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Robert Strzalko]

Very sensual, as always. He's a lucky man to have your devotion.

[Kashif Waqas Ramay]

OMG OMG wowwwwwww....... :)
thank you,,

[Leigh]

Punchy and powerful. I like the way you block out the world to concentrate on your love.

'The noisy confusion of the stars' I take to mean the problems and headaches of the world around you.

[Shaquana Adams]

Short but brilliant. Beautifully penned. I love it!
-QuanaWana

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The poem can be about a girl that plays her cards by using reverse psychology to reach, alter and ignite her interested person insigths of desire while giving her the uncluttered formula to repeat it and dominate at her will without hurting herself through shattered glass

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Short but powerful. I really like this poem. great work!

[Quill~]

:) thanks Jessica! :)

[Justin]

that was amazing!!!! i really enjoyed it :)

[Quill~]

:) thanks Justin. glad you enjoyed! :)

[Justin]

your welcome, it is one of my favorite ones you have done!!

[Quill~]

:) wow! thank you. :)

[Justin]

your welcome, that is what friends are for :)

[Quill~]

:) :) :) :)

[Justin]

i am glad we are friends ;)

[Quill~]

so am I. ;)

[Justin]

awwwwwww :) do you have anything new up :)

[Quill~]

no, not at this moment. :)
just hanging out today. :)

[Justin]

yea same here lol :P

[Justin]

yea same here lol :P

[Quill~]

good to know. lol :P

[MsJewel]

Absolutely beautiful!

:) Julie

[Quill~]

:) thank you! :)