In Red...

In Red...

A Poem by Quill~
"

Unspoken words...

"

Reds
Strong and tall
you built impenetrable walls,
you invited me in
to sit with you for a while,
when truly a moment was all you had...

With a dysfunctional heart, I knew
I was facing the inevitable winds of change,
as we slipped through the cracks of time
I struggled to memorize your smile...

To remember every soft line, every whisper;
when you told me you loved me,
why did you blind my eyes?
blurring hues of red...

Your unspoken words,
I turn them over and over
inside my head,
as Autumn begs to move on...

© 2013 Quill~


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Quill~

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A crave of the perfect love, lust, emotion, exchange and PG no less. Hidden hints and screaming ones are what makes this interesting.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thanks MoriartyMesa.
A seductive image you've created here, love the tense, taste and nostalgia, if the color red could be explained this would be it...great job

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thanks Nicky! Happy to see you here...
To break the heart of one so beautiful as in the image is a rash move indeed! You have described the painful scene of broken love so accurately and painfully and then Autumn a beautiful touch at the end.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thank you Darlin'!
A sadness pervades this love poem. Fleeting as it was, it seems it was a worthy one. There's a typo in the last line I think.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thanks Mark. what typo? (please point it out... I'll edit)
Mark

10 Years Ago

Last line... 'moves on' should be 'move on'
Quill~

10 Years Ago

ahhh thank you! thank you! lol
Lovely poem; you really paint an image. Song does nothing for it though; the poem is good on its own.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thank you muchly Elliott...the song plays my heart.
The title , the poem , the song are all wonderful although sad but I like them...Bravo

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thanks kindly Sami.
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)......................
its funny, I see so much of myself in this. it's truly beautiful, dark and yet hopeful. Well done

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) glad you see something in this... I wrote this for a heartbreaker.
thank you Daniel.
This scenario is well spoken here and the angst caused when our expectations are raised then dashed are well expressed in your narrative. Last line has an error in it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) many thank yous John!...(please let me know which error I've made so I can correct it)
I like the way you ended each stanza with a "..." like you're awaiting the inevitability of change while at the same time, wishing the moment would never end. nice write. aye plus plus.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thank you Nebunova!...happy about the 'aye plus plus', is a good thing. lol
Beautifully written, tender and heartfelt yet also depressing. Excellent imagery and prose. Nice work Quill!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Quill~

10 Years Ago

:) thank you muchly Keith!

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I'm a romantic at heart, here to express myself through my work...I write for me. I welcome others to read. I look forward to learning and sharing thoughts, through poetry and stories. :) Quill~ .. more..

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