Strong and tall
you built impenetrable walls,
you invited me in
to sit with you for a while,
when truly a moment was all you had...
With a dysfunctional heart, I knew
I was facing the inevitable winds of change,
as we slipped through the cracks of time
I struggled to memorize your smile...
To remember every soft line, every whisper; when you told me you loved me,
why did you blind my eyes?
blurring hues of red...
Your unspoken words,
I turn them over and over
inside my head,
as Autumn begs to move on...
To break the heart of one so beautiful as in the image is a rash move indeed! You have described the painful scene of broken love so accurately and painfully and then Autumn a beautiful touch at the end.
This scenario is well spoken here and the angst caused when our expectations are raised then dashed are well expressed in your narrative. Last line has an error in it.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
:) many thank yous John!...(please let me know which error I've made so I can correct it)
I like the way you ended each stanza with a "..." like you're awaiting the inevitability of change while at the same time, wishing the moment would never end. nice write. aye plus plus.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
:) thank you Nebunova!...happy about the 'aye plus plus', is a good thing. lol
I'm a romantic at heart, here to express myself through my work...I write for me. I welcome others to read. I look forward to learning and sharing thoughts, through poetry and stories. :)
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