Free Bird...

A prose~ For a sweet poet...

He was born at sunrise
waiting for a soul connection
with flaming eyes wide open
lightning strikes a faceted prism...
earth trembling under his feet
a thunderstorm chasing her wings
his little bird took flight
spanning the horizon 
he followed her off the cliff
a newborn meeting the sky
a free bird...his life begins...

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

A beautiful poem of first flight and growth. It was constructed flawlessly. I thank you for sharing it.

[Quill~]

:) thank you so much.

[Everett DeValle]

Bon soir, Madame...J'aime votre poeme. Elle est belle. En passant, j'adore la chanson 'sweater weather' sur votre page. :)

[Quill~]

:) je l'aime trop...merci beaucoup, Everett.

[Everett DeValle]

De rein, Madame...ca va?

[Quill~]

vous êtes très amiable... :)

[Everett DeValle]

Ah, magnifique. :)

Au revoir mon ami. :)

[Quill~]

bonne nuit...plaisir de vous voir a nouveau. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Oui, Madame...merci beaucoup. :)

[Quill~]

et vous aussi, Everett. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Je suis heureux de vous voir dans un bon état d'esprit. :)

Au revoir, Madame...L'Amour. :)

[Quill~]

vous êtes doux... au revoir mon ami. :)

[Everett DeValle]

I just Love this poem...like the bird was birth in that moment...perched and ready to fly...my hats off to you, Madame. Beautiful art. :)

[Quill~]

thank you, it's a free flow, or it was an attempt. I still ended up tweaking it...lol

[Everett DeValle]

Free flows are the best because you capture your words in the height of expression...you feel your words...thus, your readers feel it too. :)

Lovely free flow. :)

[Quill~]

all I can do is try. lol
thanks again. :)

[Everett DeValle]

And try you must...it shall be. :)

You are most welcome, Quill...it was pleasure if mine to read your poem. :)

[wunder]

~"he followed her off the cliff
a newborn meeting the sky
a free bird...his life begins..."~
(I Love This!!!~)
~you seem to become more creative
with every piece of poetry you write~ :))

[Vile]

This is a lovely piece, it's very sweet and warm...comforting. You have a nice tone to your writing, and it makes the reader feel it. Very well done. :D

[Quill~]

:) thank you muchly V!... so glad you felt the warmth here.

[Friday]

Very beautiful and delicate imagery. To me it seems to have an interesting twist by the ending. Very fine!

[Quill~]

:) many thank yous Friday!

[Angi]

Beautiful, soaring words filled with sharp imagery. Just the stuff I like! Well done, Quill. Angi~

[Quill~]

:) thank you Angi!

[Tim Piotrowicz]

a gem of poems. I read it and although I do not completely understand, it is in my ignorance I see a new bird flying free. well done.

[Quill~]

:) it's how the reader envisions it.. much appreciated Tim!

[ENJOY A CUP OF COFFEE]

I love the word choices. and it is a very calm, and peaceful poem. I needed that after reading all these crazy ones haha. Thank you.

[Quill~]

:) glad you found something calm. thank you!

[David Scott]

I just played "Free Bird" for my son this week end. He loves guitar so the song was a hit with him.
You bring me back to a line or two in the music with your poem. I especially like, "with flaming eyes wide open lightning strikes a faceted prism..."

[Quill~]

:)) I love that song. thank you David!