Good morning, love...

Are you an Angel?... ;)

Palpitating heart
dreams still flickering
trembling in splendid spoils
touched by an Angel
or could he be more?...

Soft downy feathers
tenderly grazed, tickling my skin
quietly he crept
and layed beside me
his eyes stripped me bare

Naked...blushing all over
down to my anxious thighs
engulfed in a moonlight haze
a blurry vision
pleasing me in manys ways

No mortal man could
bestow this kind of magic
to leave a dripping trail
of white washed dreams
in wanton beads of morning dew...

Reviews

[Brad MacDonald]

I've been reading more of your pieces and really admire how you balance sensuality and other genuine human emotions. The sensual elements are great but made more powerful by the other emotional insights.

[Quill~]

:) thank you Brad!

[Caradoc]

This made me grin and reminded me, interestingly enough, about the Bible. One area speaks of the Nephilim, the children that resulted of the union between the 'sons of God' and the 'daughters of man'. A popular theory states that the sons of God were angels.

It's a pretty poem, but at the end, it strikes me as...limiting and full of self-sabotage on the part of the narrator. She longs for pleasure that can only be found in dreams or the arms of someone that is not mortal, someone she, in all probability, will never meet. Thus, she can never be happy with a 'mere' man. It reminds me of one too many tales I've heard of women, girls really, that left their significant others not because of any problem that was going on, but because their partner didn't compare to their fantasy of a perfect man.

Please don't take this as a criticism of the poem itself. It is merely an opinion on the subject matter. I also understand that the problem isn't confined to women. Just, it irks me to hear or see someone ignoring what is right in front of them in favor of some fantasy ideal they'll never acquire.

It is a nice poem, though, one that is well written.

-Caradoc

[Quill~]

:) thank you Caradoc...I find your thoughts intriguing...
you overwhelm me (in a good way)... never hold back your opinions, you are honest and I respect that.

[Caradoc]

You're welcome. And thank you.

[Antoñyo]

At this moment I'm feeling fairly proud that I don't strive to be mere mortal man...however, I wish I dreamt because one would sooner or later sound this good.

Thanks for the wonderful share

[Quill~]

:) much appreciated Antonyo!

[h d e rushin]

I grew up a romantic, often carrying Walter Benton's "This is my Beloved" with me to my
every high school class. I learned to recite each line, and if I close my eyes and listen to
my inner ear, your final stanza reads like, and sounds like a continuation of that wonderful
book of poetry. What a wonderful treatment of morning love..

Well done,
dana

[Quill~]

:) thanks for your beautiful words dana.

[melissa]

sensual and hot i liked this:)

[wunder]

~"No mortal man could
bestow this kind of magic
to leave a dripping trail
of white washed dreams
in wanton beads of morning dew..."~
~niiice-a very sleek and silky write~very kool-i love!~

[Quill~]

:) you're "kool"... thanks James!

[wunder]

~my pleasure~ ;)

[Frieda P]

Woo sensuality personified....definitely a good morning!

[Quill~]

:) it is a good morning!... thank you Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Good on you Quill! ;-)

[Everett DeValle]

'Naked...blushing all over down to my anxious thighs'...sorry I had to quote this...just stood out to me...the whole poem is such a sensual and tender write...beautiful display of emotive passion.

[Quill~]

:) merci beaucoup!!

[Everett DeValle]

De rein, Mademoiselle...comment ca va?

[Quill~]

Je suis bien et vous?

[Everett DeValle]

Oui, ca va bien. :)

Still want to go to that island? :)

[Quill~]

absolutely. :)

[Everett DeValle]

I'm sending my magic carpet. :)

You never told me how you learned French.

[Quill~]

My best friend. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Cool. He's French?

[Quill~]

VERY. :) ********

[Everett DeValle]

That's so cool...did you meet him in France?

[Quill~]

sorry, I'm actually talking to him right now! lol

[Quill~]

He says "quoi de neuf" :)

[Quill~]

Bonjour! :)

[Everett DeValle]

Ah I see...hey if you can please give pointers...I would greatly appreciate it with your experience...I'm an eager learner. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Bonjour Monsieur :)

[Quill~]

cool...message me anytime... my bestfriend is cool with it too...
He promises not to get jealous... "isn't that right Pierre?" Ha ha :))

[Quill~]

his response is "Surement pas!!" lmao!

[Everett DeValle]

I'm not the jealous type either...it comes with experience...I really wanted to ask you that the other night...sure ill pm you for practice, if you don't mind...I wanted brush up on it. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Tres bien...merci beaucoup, Monsieur. :)

[Quill~]

ha ha

he says, "vous etes les bienvenus". :)

anytime, Everett!

read moreha ha

he says, "vous etes les bienvenus". :)

anytime, Everett!

and thank you!

[Everett DeValle]

Very cool...so French...sorry, the culture does have a strong influence on me since high school...too bad, I never followed up, due to life circumstances...I do apply French aesthetics in my writing. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Will do...Au revoir, Madame et Monsieur. :)

[Quill~]

You should, you are already ahead. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Merc beaucoup, Madame.

[Quill~]

merci bien, mon ami.

[Everett DeValle]

Nice...I flex your French...makes me think outside the box more. :)

[Everett DeValle]

Sheesh...spellchecks sorry, I like how you flex your french.

[Quill~]

ha ha... that's cool... thanks.
You too. :)

[Everett DeValle]

That's what happen to me the other times...I'm typing fast with one finger on an iPhone...and I'm multi tasking other things. So it was so cool to practice from memory. :)

[Quill~]

you're talented to do that. :D

[Everett DeValle]

Awe thank you...so no translator...if I did, I wouldn't have gotten stuck lol I hope to read more of your artful words, Madame. ;)

[Quill~]

thanks... I will be reading you soon, promise.
I'm in the middle of a few writes. :)
You are so sweet to notice my work. very appreciated friend!

[Everett DeValle]

I don't force reviews on my writing...I keep organic...I believe in free will. However, I greatly appreciate your consideration. :)

[Quill~]

:) I'm a willing participant. lol

[Everett DeValle]

All I can say, It's greatly appreciated. :)

[Quill~]

will be by tomorrow, then... :)
I'm going to sleep now...profiter de votre nuit!
and thank you.

[Everett DeValle]

Merci bien, Madame...hmm I'm gonna use that.

[Quill~]

please do... anytime. :)

[ron]

Very erotic and sensual as always. You are once again proving how to show feeling, desires, and love in words so tender.

[Quill~]

:) thank you... although I enjoy writing in this style, I'm trying to change it up.

[ron]

Your doing a wonderfull job.

[Quill~]

well tanka! :D

[Karl Woof Junior]

erotically divine once again very lyrical im not immortal but i enjoy writing sincerely too in a VERY different way, if you want, i think you might like this one, let me know http://foemeno.hubpages.com/hub/Compete-or-be-dismissed

[Quill~]

:) thanks...glad you enjoyed!...I'll check it out.

[Quill~]

:) read "Compete or to be dismissed"...it's good! I like the "Kung-fu" analogy.