Unrequited Love

This was actually intended to be a song but, as I have no musical ability whatsoever, it became a poem.

Unrequited Love,

Do you know my name?

In my eyes you are flawless

I am drawn into your pain

Let me be the torch of light

Guiding you through your darkest night

Let my face be what you see

As you bathe yourself in misery

Decadent angel

Sweet tortured soul

A gleaned bit of onyx

Wrapped in my folds

Let me save you from this fight

And dissolve into the night

Existing as traces of ecstasy

Let me live on in your memory

Drawn into reality it would not last

Let our love exist only through rose tinted glass

And bask in the radiance from above…

Let me be your unrequited love

Reviews

[Emily]

This is a really well done piece. I'm not usually one for rhyme, but over and over I'm shown examples which are not forced and where the rhyme scheme and the word choice are very well done. This is a sterling example of that.
This has a song like melody to it as you read, it almost weaves itself from the writer to the reader, as though the reader an feel the notes and words flowing between the two you've written about.

Nice work!

[R. Nella]

This is very well written. Love shared yet unrequited, definitely not the ending I would have expected.

[M O R P H I N E]

Wow...this is really beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this and I was lost in the words, to be honest. I think you've written this very well, I love the rhyming and the flow is just...perfect.
Great write.
Please don't stop writing.