Untitled.

This was also written by my friend, who is too shy to admit he has darker thoughts than it would seem to anyone else but me.

I’m just taking in

This breath of pain

I’m just barely on the ground

 

I heard my soul collapse

As this endless pain begins to relapse

We sail in a sea of fear

 

To purge your soul of all that is light

Feeding your soul to the night

Forever bleeding through the break of dawn

It was lost and now it’s gone

 

See the hatred in their eyes

This fire will rage and burn

Until all the torment hidden within their cries die inside

 

Haunted forever by your whispered laughter

Stabbing me with your hate

We will stand in sorrow and pain

 

Until the end of time

Smiles will fade

And sadness will rise

 

And the dark is beckoning

To the tortured souls and the dead sunrise

As all life is hidden from my eyes

I feel everything go cold

My last breath feels so alive

Author's Note

REMEMBER, I DID NOT WRITE THIS. DO NOT GIVE ME CREDIT.
but i will share any feedback with him, because I think this deserves it.

thank you (:

Reviews

[Lukas]

I have the feeling I know who wrote this... and that's a good thing, because its quite something in it's own right. Your metaphors and similies are beautiful, as is the meaning behind it all. I also love the general motif of rising and falling, dawn and dusk....
I really like it :)