I See Your Face

I See Your Face

A Poem by Chaotica
"

Oh... you know... everyone goes through it.

"

I think I'm fine,
and try to fly;
I see your face,
and then I fall
 

                                once again.
 

I hit the bottom,
shattered, broken;
I start to believe
I'll never breathe
 

                                again. 

Starving for bliss,
I need to bleed,
drain my body,
fade to black

 

                                once again.

 

It's the only thing
that gets me through,
I can't escape this,
like a noose around my throat.

 

If I stay still, the pain lingers, just
throbs.

If I try to escape, the rope gets
tighter.

 

a sudden snap and

     i die,

 

                                again.

© 2008 Chaotica


Author's Note

Chaotica
for a bit, i had something cool going on, with the last word of each line starting all with the same letter for each.. stanza? is that what they're called?

then I kind of lost it and i got two lines to match instead.
that i really lost it, and I just made it end with the

again,
once again,
thing...


thats all.

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Painfully beautiful. Yes I agree, we have all felt like this. You depicted the emotions, pain, anguish so well I was reliving it there for a few minutes.

If I stay still, the pain lingers, just
throbs.

If I try to escape, the rope gets
tighter.

You captured it perfectly! You have a powerful way to get so much through in so few words.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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You really do accomplish the goal of poetry: create the most powerful image and emotion with the fewest number of words. This one is so tragic, yet so beautiful, its... i just love it. "Like a noose around my throat... a sudden snap and I die, again."

Posted 16 Years Ago


this was cleaver. i enjoyed it all the way through!MG

Posted 16 Years Ago


Painfully beautiful. Yes I agree, we have all felt like this. You depicted the emotions, pain, anguish so well I was reliving it there for a few minutes.

If I stay still, the pain lingers, just
throbs.

If I try to escape, the rope gets
tighter.

You captured it perfectly! You have a powerful way to get so much through in so few words.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent poem, a pleasure to read, but I have a question if you didn't want anyone you know to read your work why post it? And you say your a nobody like all of the rest. God didn't think you were a nobody or he wouldn't have put you here on Earth. Nice writing.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Chaotica
Chaotica

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i don't care for grammar. i like to swear. i jump around. my thoughts don't like to stay on the same track. I'm brutally depressing, ridiculously repetitive, surprisingly pretty good with words... more..

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