The Witches Song

            It was as if I could never hold her tight enough. Like I could use all the physical strength at my disposal and she would still be at high risk of just slipping away. With her, the tighter I held, the less secure I felt. She was the eggshell swimming in a sea of yolk, oblivious to clumsy prodding digits as she sailed smoothly away. But she always stayed on the periphery of my mind.

She lived in my mind. She was the nourishment of which my mind lived and thrived. There was not a day, hour, even minute that she was not present in my thoughts in some form or another. She knew it too. She could entice and extract any thought. My head was like her brewing pot. Her grey eyes bore into me and kept me always in her witches spell.

She used to whisper enchantments in my ears. I was helpless against her siren song. I was ready to plunge headfirst into deadly seas just to hear her speak once more; desperate to have her whispers run wild through my head. Her words would set fire to my mind.

 

 

I was burning when I did it. I could hear the fire crackle as I held her tight, trying hard not to let her slip away. My hands caressed her neck until her whispers stopped. Her Grey eyes held mine and we danced to her song in attempt to put out the flames. I promised I would never let her go.

Author's Note

I'm wondering mostly about the ending. I was trying to make it subtle, but is it too subtle? Is the ending understood?

Reviews

[Abhijit "Monty&quo..]

Nicely done, my only gripe is that it's a bit too short, the same can be said about your previous work "Reason". You are doing good, now about the ending it does feels a bit stifled. overall its all good. loved it, will be anticipating your next.