Lightning Strikes the Coolest Clear

Lightning Strikes the Coolest Clear

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Instead, I leave the view to face itself...........

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When lightning strikes the coolest clear

you can see me standing
in my own skin,
not playing with the sky
to get a different song or dance.  
Still, Darkness places his fingers inside me,
encourages me to write,
to respond as if my name is without
life's second chance.

I think of asking why
my eyes relentlessly search
for lost time
through a window
I should have forgotten
before my eyes
even took it in.  
Instead, I leave the view
to face itself
swim into the ocean
I call Serenity,
softly sing my song of peace
once again.

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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This is breathaking , emotional write Neva , writing is perhaps the second chance but sometimes we play the same song expecting a different outcome . The imagery so beautiful, leaving the view to face itself and trying to find peace amidst the turmoil. Outstanding as usaul.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you Moon XX



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This reminds of the Beetles' "Let it Be"... in this case Let Darkness make/be his own Serenity. A with that philosophy you are free. Neat write depicting the way feelings can surge to a point where one just has to let go... just like lightning let's itself go.
Well done. (Sorry it took me so long)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This piece has so much depth... the more number of times I read it, the profound the meaning gets...

Beautiful, ma'am. Just beautiful.
Thank you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ocean Serenity, peace. Letting go the past is embracing freedom. To hold on to it is to shackle ourselves. Lovely work as always Neva.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you Mark :)
Breathtakingly beautiful imagery! Intense, but carefully crafted poem! :D Lovely.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you Phantom Rose :)
Rose of Gondor

12 Years Ago

My pleasure :D
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I felt like I was floating in water... I love your writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For a a moment I thought the picture out did the poem,then my thoughts got lost in your second chance,life and chances, I enjoyed it , a good swim.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you lee :)
This is my favourite of your poems. Its beautiful.
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Posted 12 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you Paulo :)
Pól

12 Years Ago

309 views. Christ-I'm lucky to get 30. Up til about 2 days ago i would have said i hated poetry- a.. read more
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

I am so glad. I had no interest in poetry whatsoever until the Spring of 2009, when I discovered I .. read more
MY MY your mind does wander all; about.I suppose it a musing of the poet to constantly put together and take apart the world of maginings

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you my sweet friend :) X
well I can't do what you seem to do so effortlessly...Stunning imagery...Thank you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you Dr. Wood, we all have our own individual talent and you have yours. Wouldn't it be a bori.. read more
It is just doggone difficult, my dear, to find any flaws in your poetry. That makes you a rare breed on this site. The song of peace sung at the end, is one that I can sing with you. The ocean of serenity is wide and embracing where you swim.


Posted 12 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

12 Years Ago

Thank you Dean ((XX

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Added on June 17, 2012
Last Updated on June 17, 2012
Tags: lightning, skin, sky, song, dance, darkness, fingers, name, life

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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