Looking Into the Transparency of Your Soul

Transparency of your soul looks me in the eye
and I can see the weight of the world
breathing possessively
as you whisper why.
I can read your thoughts better
than I can read your lips
and there is no question
as to what the words mean
delivered.........
with your each and every sigh.

I believe someone told you
the world wears a veiled smile
and attempts
to cling deceptively to your every breath
like a warrior breaks all stillness.
Yet, I see that you are not afraid
to sit and think
about how great men can fall in a moment
when preyed upon...........
by life's unwillingness.

Come with me when your heart aches
from standing in the shadows
of those thoughts
that have been tucked away
in the air you breathe.
Always remember that our time
waits in a path of sunlight
lying beyond the stillness
that will never fade
from all.........
that we can feel
and see.

Yes, the fingertips of happiness
strum my words
setting fires ablaze
so you can see me looking
into the transparency of your soul.
Everything is well-defined
even if it seems out of your control
and there is no need to apologize
when the weight of the world
keeps you.....
from feeling whole.

Reviews

[fireblossom]

There is something about your writing that pulls emotion up inside of me. Your writing is deceptive. I mean that in a very positive praising way. The rhythm and meter of this piece is simple and straightforward. One might see the 'form' on an inspirational card. However, and this is where the deceptive part comes it, your writing goes very deep emotionally. Like a sirens call drifting with the wind and crashing waves, it is powerful, meaningful on the level of life and death.

We are all better off reading your poetry.

[Kes]

Wow I really like this. I see something of it in myself and others. You've captured these feelings so well.
You're an artist. :)
K

[quinfinn]

you have an amazing ability to draw the reader into your imagery with beautifully expressed and raw emotion, often, as with this write, i am left breathless from feeling the images you project...it is so personal...sure you aren't using a spell?

[Jillian Alexis]

I am speechless! This is truly a remarkable piece. Once again; your thoughts flowed masterfully upon the blank canvas...simply stunning!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love how you explore deeply, each stanza highlights it,
it is marvellous :D

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

This is lovely, also giving off the impression of sadness -- like a feeling of neglect from a lover or something. At least, that was my impression. Beautifully penned. I loved this piece.

[Coyote Poetry]

"Everything is well-defined
even if it seems out of your control
and there is no need to apologize
when the weight of the world
keeps you.....
from feeling whole."
Complete poem was amazing. The last paragraph was perfect. Thank you for sharing your amazing poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

[Forevermore]

i love it, u gave me alot to think abt. awesome write my friend

[?]

I can read your thoughts better
than I can read your lips

Now aren't women the master of reading thoughts better than lips...lol
This is beautiful Neva..lovely thoughts of the caring of one for another...just as you said in your poem "Everything is well-defined" in this piece..Another beauty!!

[Ed Hart]

a lovely write Neva, comforting...a place to rest

[J. J. Nightingale]

Sorry I do not possess the tools, to understand your words ..

Jasmine ..