Looking Into the Transparency of Your Soul

Transparency of your soul looks me in the eye
and I can see the weight of the world
breathing possessively
as you whisper why.
I can read your thoughts better
than I can read your lips
and there is no question
as to what the words mean
delivered.........
with your each and every sigh.

I believe someone told you
the world wears a veiled smile
and attempts
to cling deceptively to your every breath
like a warrior breaks all stillness.
Yet, I see that you are not afraid
to sit and think
about how great men can fall in a moment
when preyed upon...........
by life's unwillingness.

Come with me when your heart aches
from standing in the shadows
of those thoughts
that have been tucked away
in the air you breathe.
Always remember that our time
waits in a path of sunlight
lying beyond the stillness
that will never fade
from all.........
that we can feel
and see.

Yes, the fingertips of happiness
strum my words
setting fires ablaze
so you can see me looking
into the transparency of your soul.
Everything is well-defined
even if it seems out of your control
and there is no need to apologize
when the weight of the world
keeps you.....
from feeling whole.

Reviews

[fireblossom]

There is something about your writing that pulls emotion up inside of me. Your writing is deceptive. I mean that in a very positive praising way. The rhythm and meter of this piece is simple and straightforward. One might see the 'form' on an inspirational card. However, and this is where the deceptive part comes it, your writing goes very deep emotionally. Like a sirens call drifting with the wind and crashing waves, it is powerful, meaningful on the level of life and death.

We are all better off reading your poetry.

[cartera]

Basically, all you need is love, stand by me.
...................
Good insight: noting that a true lover reads the other person's thoughts better than reading the lips.
Lovely love poem that is different even although handling a subject that has almost been written to death.
ATB
Alex.

[Aidz]

There is a rythme hiding in this, a slow but purposeful pace, I think that is the key to unlocking this write.... without it, it looses its grandness and becomes messy

[Allen Smuckler]

Not many out there Neva, that can weave a tale like you...
everything you touch is always so visual and alive
you truly wear your emotions on your sleeve Neva with glistening and forgiving images that simply knock me out...
I just love reading you...have since I entered this site.
allen

[Larry Dyson]

yes..excellent images ..love "the fingertips of happiness
strum my words
setting fires ablaze
so you can see me looking
into the transparency of your soul."

[Prashanth Ashok]

Nice writing, especially an apt last paragraph

[Katie Flores]

i love the movement of this piece, how it has strength "possessively", but also softness of the last paragraph.i read in an earlier post, that it was a "haven" and i trend to agree in that description. its like someone's arms you want to fall into after a hard day and they are reassuring you that it is okay. :) wonderful.

[poeticpiers]

A compellingly powerful piece of writing.Open to many interpretations. An offer of a haven when life becomes too much. I do believe no one is self sufficiently whole. every one need someone. But sadly it is not the case they find that someone. A sad tone to the poem but a note of hope lifts it

[Draven]

Beautiful, a true masterpiece.