Looking Into the Transparency of Your Soul

Transparency of your soul looks me in the eye
and I can see the weight of the world
breathing possessively
as you whisper why.
I can read your thoughts better
than I can read your lips
and there is no question
as to what the words mean
delivered.........
with your each and every sigh.

I believe someone told you
the world wears a veiled smile
and attempts
to cling deceptively to your every breath
like a warrior breaks all stillness.
Yet, I see that you are not afraid
to sit and think
about how great men can fall in a moment
when preyed upon...........
by life's unwillingness.

Come with me when your heart aches
from standing in the shadows
of those thoughts
that have been tucked away
in the air you breathe.
Always remember that our time
waits in a path of sunlight
lying beyond the stillness
that will never fade
from all.........
that we can feel
and see.

Yes, the fingertips of happiness
strum my words
setting fires ablaze
so you can see me looking
into the transparency of your soul.
Everything is well-defined
even if it seems out of your control
and there is no need to apologize
when the weight of the world
keeps you.....
from feeling whole.

Reviews

[fireblossom]

There is something about your writing that pulls emotion up inside of me. Your writing is deceptive. I mean that in a very positive praising way. The rhythm and meter of this piece is simple and straightforward. One might see the 'form' on an inspirational card. However, and this is where the deceptive part comes it, your writing goes very deep emotionally. Like a sirens call drifting with the wind and crashing waves, it is powerful, meaningful on the level of life and death.

We are all better off reading your poetry.

[Becky C Strukamp]

And outstanding self reflection of ones soul, thoughts, heartaches. I love the manner in which you format your poetry and the picture is perfect. As you view the picture and read one can imaging ushing to themselves. Packed with emotion. A powerful deliverance.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you :)

[...]

You are a truly soulful, beautiful poet, Neva! I can sense the deep earnest of which you write!!!

[Honey54]

OMG!! I LOVE THIS! SO MUCH STRENGTH AND POWER IN THOSE BEAUTIFUL WORDS..I FELT LIKE EACH WORD SPILLED OUT A VIVID PICTURE AND IT REALLY CAPTURED ME! NICE POEM! DEFINTELY A FAV IN MY BOOK!- H O N E Y

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Inspirational work. I was touched by the healing power of the heart.
Heavy...heavy work.

[Mark]

I imagine a couple, knowing each other so well... "I can read your thoughts better than I can read your lips"... They find solace in each other. Very warm, and enjoyable read.

[unknown]

A look into one's self, encouraging!

[An owl on the moon]

A work of art formed and framed in words... lifting and wondrous... You breathe out what a relationship of genuine feeling and connection can be, and what I wish everyone could experience.

[Tarry Franck]

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful...I believe someone told you
the world wears a veiled smile
and attempts
to cling deceptively to your every breath
like a warrior breaks all stillness.
Yet, I see that you are not afraid
to sit and think
about how great men can fall in a moment
when preyed upon...........
by life's unwillingness. - Love it, love it, love it!!!!

[ErikHansen67]

I love where this takes me. The flow of the piece with its internal rhyme is, at the same time, intimate and supportive. Warm and uplifitng. Bravo!

[Letemdangle]

I think your words are capable of seducing me into anywhere you want to put me. Such power!