My Heart - Down Upon its Knees

I ask myself if there is a better place
where I can laugh
in the sweetest whisper
and find myself playing tug of war
with distant memories
until they become
a single story.

Under a quiet night I look up
to count my courage
on each flower
of an apple tree
until morning
looks in on me.
Somehow, I am always left
with my heart
down upon its knees.

I sense that everything dances
within my feelings
warming my thoughts
and just one word
can fill my spirit with you.
Holding on to your hands
knowing a fire still roars
as a friend of truth.

Laughing inside, I forget about
how rain streamed
like a million rivers
upon all the grasses that used to be.
Pleasure floods through me
like moonlight admires
its own face over the sea.

I ask myself if there is a better place
where I can laugh
in the sweetest whisper,
perhaps change
what I understand to be.
Once again, I find myself
staring at my heart,
down upon its knees.

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

This is good: generally we like to face life standing proud on our feet; when we come to our knees in humility, we face the Truth as the Truth reveals itself to us. I agree with Muse's review--your writing gets more and more beautiful, more profound, with every poem, every story. It's like there's a bottomless well of creativity and flow within you that runs from your soul to your pen. I would honestly love to get your autograph and frame it!
You're an incredible writer, ma'am! :)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I love the journey and poetic creativity you conjure up with your writes. Simply beautiful as always, Neva. Beautifully penned.

[AK]

Wow! That was a beautiful poem! The repitition added fuel to this amazing piece. Great job!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the journey you took me with in your words. The repetition gave strength to the poem. Strong statements led to a very good ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[fireblossom]

I really like how focused and direct this is. Some very nice turns of phrase here - 'like moonlight admires its own face over the sea... A great line...

This poem also has you showing an insecure side of yourself. It feels very genuine. Well done.

[Zachary_James]

Stunning Neva like always, you my friend have a creative mind.

[jennifer little]

wonderful work i loved reading this and great job and nice write by the way i loved this piece and thanks for sharing this with me

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A most fluid and entertaining piece, perfectly flowed, from a woman I've come to reveer as a master! x

[WhiteWillow]

Spirit, fire, water, nature. You are amazing! You can fit every nuance into one piece without overwhelming the senses. You magician, you! Beautiful. xo

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

This was very readable and entertaining. The picture is so beautiful and dreamy it matched the poem exactly.

[Vacant]

I think this is beautiful; the natural imagery is just wonderful, and captures a sense of heightened emotion.