In the Shadows of Wanting More

A path to evening drops into life
like a maze full of sin.
Complete with smiles
no poet can divide.
Protection from the air is grim
same as a marriage
woven in a mist
of distrust and lies.

A sad, sad spell enchants your hands
when you lie naked
in the shadows of wanting more.
You cannot help but wonder
if this means
you are dead to the skies
lying between anguish
and the path to evening, keeping score.

Your feet fill in the gaps
saying farewell to sacrifice
when midnight strikes
yet does not save you again.
You cannot walk the path to evening
if you do not know
your way out
of the maze full of sin.

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Through the entire reading of this work, I was trying if not struggling to remember a song from the 90's. The beginning made me think of a piano solo, thankfully I was able to remember the song. But to read something and remember a song from the mid 90's.....well that just about takes the cake in my book.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lAHbZsg95M0

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Lovely and old-fashion, in a good way though! Very well-written also!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

A beautifully written sad piece for love. Nicely done!

~Anna Rose

[Kelly Scheppers]

"A sad, sad spell enchants your hands
when you lie naked
in the shadows of wanting more."

Such a lovely descriptive, Neva! Simply beautiful ...


My best,
Kelly

[WhiteWillow]

A beautiful piece. I love your style; your word choice is always so lyrical, so smooth. Just lovely.

[Bridgid Persephone Newm..]

Forgiveness is the path, Love is the way. There is no separation.

[Amila Jay]

A path to evening drops into life
like a maze full of sin.
Complete with smiles
no poet can divide.
Protection from the air is grim
same as a marriage
woven in a mist
of distrust and lies.

Awesome poem:-)

[KAREN]

Beautifully written, I would love to write my favorite line, but I can't each stanza is so breathtaking I can't pick just one stanza.
100/100

[Teri B]

Very sad...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

To pretend everything is fine in a failing relationship can only last so long and increase the pain and heartache... a wonderful write for such a sad topic.