Internal Battle

Sometimes I get tired of having so little time
and plainly seeing my surroundings
crying out before the scent of dawn
has bloomed.
Can a single cloud breathe in
all of the warm air
that hails my universe,
removing all reason to wake up,
live life and resume?

I look at fleeing ships
whose sails are full of thunder
and I hear a song
dissolving the wildest parts of me.
Each note dances in the breeze
dropping its own melody
inside my heart
until it becomes the only thing
I hear inside my soul
and I struggle to even
breathe.

Author's Note

just a little rant.........

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

Your dark still has a certain softness in it's expression, I think it's because your a passionate woman and it shows through your work.. Now I wouldn't want to make you mad don't get me wrong..but in poetry you still have the magic with the words... ranting with grace and ease..xo

[realmwriter]

Just a little rant. It speaks volumes and I don't even have to turn it up...! "I look at fleeing ships whose sails are full of thunder" I love that line. The though of a sail catching and holding thunder, what an angry, awesome power. Almost wish I was aboard that sailboat, What a majestic vessel it must be...! Beautiful write Neva. Changefulstorm indeed...! But then Id have to catch my breath In the Awe that lay before my eyes...!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Even you rants are so beautiful, phrases like "Each note dances in the breeze, dropping its own melody inside my heart " beautiful :)

[Inyourshadow]

I look at fleeing ships, whose sails are full of thunder ~ so brought this to mind.

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Dylan Thomas.

Your poem is beautifully phrased painting such vivid imagery within the mind and causing one to pause and take stock of ones own existence. Keep em' coming

[WatashLegend]

Even for a "little rant" it is stunningly poetic in all of it's honest integrity, bravo!

[Liza]

a breathless tale of compassion - expressed soulfully

[∂αʌ<..]

its very very good!
i can thouroughly relate to this...sometimes, we just ignore little things to move on...but sometimes, we move on only to come back again!
mesmerising work Neva...^^

[Coyote Poetry]

I wish I had more too. Life is too fast and I can't get what I want done. I do understand the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Something a little dark than what you usually write about. And I enjoyed it very much. Wonderfully penned, emotional piece. Great Write.

[Larry Dyson]

oh I love it Neva...I would love to borrow it for a Book i'm writing it would work great for the chapter...I love your fighters instinct and the way you express it.. how you fight to the last breath here...heavens no ..is the answer to your rhetorical question here in the poem...Neva will fight and write wonderful poetry of great expression s..like this one...Bravo Girl..you are a rock star...!

[Aidz]

I like this "little" rant Neva, it sung a sweet softness in my ear, as I to struggle to breathe.