Internal Battle

Sometimes I get tired of having so little time
and plainly seeing my surroundings
crying out before the scent of dawn
has bloomed.
Can a single cloud breathe in
all of the warm air
that hails my universe,
removing all reason to wake up,
live life and resume?

I look at fleeing ships
whose sails are full of thunder
and I hear a song
dissolving the wildest parts of me.
Each note dances in the breeze
dropping its own melody
inside my heart
until it becomes the only thing
I hear inside my soul
and I struggle to even
breathe.

Author's Note

just a little rant.........

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

Your dark still has a certain softness in it's expression, I think it's because your a passionate woman and it shows through your work.. Now I wouldn't want to make you mad don't get me wrong..but in poetry you still have the magic with the words... ranting with grace and ease..xo

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very emotional.

[Rene Velez]

that's how I feel about RR'S...LOL, but seriously this is great Neva, short, direct, and moving...

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WOW Neva! This is so wonderful, i can feel depression. Nicely done!

[Birdman313]

very nice I enjoy your poems then you put it out there as
can a single cloud breath in
all of the warm air
what hails my universe.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really heartfelt and dark yet soft!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

It's amazing to read about internal chaos penned so beautifully!

[Shep]

my favorite Stanza:

Can a single cloud breathe in
all of the warm air
what hails my universe,

Very nice indeed, as always blown a way at you words of passion and grace. Loved it.

[InkSlinger]

Your vision, and understanding of life.. and how you translate it for the reader, just blows my mind.. your simple little twisiting of words ALWAYS speak to me.. just me, and yet to everyone else that reads you.. AGAIN, another magical moment spilled forth from the quill of your pen!

[Bridgid Persephone Newm..]

The trick is recognizing that this moment is all you have, and to savor it for all it's worth. It's far too easy to get caught up in distractions galore in this information age. sometimes I just shut it all off and wood carve, read a book,go walk on a beach somewhere,etc.