A Sound I Could Drink

My heart pretended
you were a sound
I could drink
when I went searching
for golden lines full of surprise.
When I walked towards you,
my ears tasted the beat of the earth
and it began to turn
in reverse.

Ringing clear were hundreds of memories
I had kissed freely,
known as all the things you did.
Then in came the rushing sea
crashing into my mind
with waves of everything
you have ever said.

Therefore, I waited by a tree
that had shown its shadow
as being all that I could ever need.
However,
when I looked inside myself,
I found my heart
cold and bare.

A sight I have now become
but there is one thing I surely know.
I could never push aside
the sound of you I drink
from all these golden lines.
My ears will walk
towards you and taste
this beat
until I make you mine.

Reviews

[NyliirStudios]

Neva,

My name is Ateldoora D. Nightmoon-Barnum and I am the Co-Director of an internationally distributed Fine Arts magazine. My staff has spent a good deal of time searching for a way to contact you and have found nothing. I would like to speak with you about possibly publishing your poem " A sound I could drink" with our magazine. Please reach me at [email protected]. I look forward to hearing from you.

[Elephants & Coyotes]

What a delightful play with the senses.
A magical sensory experience, fantastically written, as always.
=)

[Lily Mae]

"Therefore, I waited by a tree
that had shown its shadow
as being all that I could ever need".

Things that make me go hmmmm ;) You've left me in my own thoughts and dreams with this one :) xx

[Muse]

I love it when you blend all senses together as one. Sight becomes smell, a sound becomes a taste. It creates a magical trip for the reader. Well done Neva.

[An owl on the moon]

Everything about this is captivating, from the poignant title and that exquisite image, to the very last longing line... A music is here, flowing over space and time, and making the world dance in its wake.

[bobby]

Oh Yes this is good! I like it very much and the picture you chose perfect too. "Golden lines full of surprise"...thats you and your writing ability well done here...

[Rene Velez]

whoa, powerful write Neva, forceful and wanting, really nice...

[TJ]

Neva, this is the first piece I've read since returning from my time away and it shows me exactly why I missed the cafe so much. I loved the Artful way you painted your metaphor and the magnificent images you created in my mind. This kind of spoke to me. Giving up on what you wanted because you think you found something else that can satisfy your needs... Only to go back to what you originally chased...
Wonderful piece, Neva, as always!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh so romantic and eloquently written.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Beautiful poem, love the reflection :)

[Thea]

Oh! Wonderful ending for a very well written poem! And, I really like the picture! Fantastic piece... :)))