Capturing Visions

Capturing Visions

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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We welcomed hands building walls around our Troy..............

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Oh, how we wished to capture visions

 drink love from altars
where we shared those nights
 so sweet.
To chase away
those hours

when heartbreak regarded our affection
from places deeper than days
 that could not  
look inside our needs.

The rain knows how we tenderly searched
for sun lying dormant
 when nothing said goodbye
Even though
we welcomed hands building walls
around our Troy
Neither of us could see our own faces
or recognize
the heart we should know
before our own eyes.

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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A strong poem. The use of Troy in the poem left me with questions. The walls were strong. But could be broken in by secret and con.
'The rain knows how we tenderly searched
for sun lying dormant
when nothing said goodbye"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wow. This I love in its entirety, particularly the last line "Neither of us could see our own faces / or recognize / the heart we should know / before our own eyes." Tragic. Sad, but also true. Even in good relationships times like these are experienced, and you have captured the pain and actuality of said moments accurately and beautifully here. Thank you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a great descriptive write. Love is mysterious sometimes and changes forms and faces all the time. Love is the emotion that can be felt in many different ways for different things and it can cause us to feel a whole array of other emotions to go along with it. This is an inspiring write.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on July 28, 2011
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Tags: poetry, visions, Troy, altar, rain, sun

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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