Underneath A Whisper of Darkness

Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle burning
Fear and suspicion caress the flame
Invisible hands of time lay at rest and waiting
Softly murmuring in lines of ink
Across the page

The sound of scars echo in the whisper of darkness
Breathing in the essence of the flame
While time rolls words in the crystal ink of pain
Upon the pages of the heart
That still remains

Experience fades to colors that whisper in the darkness
Softly playing with edges of the flame
As time slowly spreads the ink across the pages
Of an existence eagerly awaiting
To live again

Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle waiting
Within a heart held prisoner by a mind
Caressed by the scars of fear and suspicion
So deeply engraved by invisible
Hands of time

Author's Note

Photography of Eddie O'Bryan

Reviews

[Larry Dyson]

wonderfully chosen words penned just perfectly..suggesting that something else be added or changed..you know Me always wanting to improve...
anyways..
Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle burning
Fear and suspicion caress the flame
Invisible hands of time lay at rest and waiting
Softly murmuring in lines of ink
Across the page

The sound of scars echo in the whisper of darkness
Breathing in the essence of the flame
While time watches words on the pen
slide resolutely down it's shaft
Spreading the crystal ink of pain
Upon the pages of the heart
That still remains..

what if?or is it still what you wish to say?

[Dream Weaver]

Lovely as ever. The third stanza did it
for me. beautifully done xx

[deeps]

This is just so beautiful. This is one of my faves from you I think. I just loved the last stanza.

[VelvetRosetta]

Stunning, I love this....Underneath a whisper of darkness

[EMF]

I have often read books, seen films or plays that draw me into the encapsulated universe so fully that I forget I am an observer. This poem, along with all of yours does just that. You cannot help but feel the strength of emotion, the pain, the hope. One cannot hope for better.

[brenda]

thia si truly wonderful and absolutely amazing love it !:) favorite !:)

[Lily Mae]

I've never been normal but I felt while reading this that the words..the colors..the paint was making love to the flame.. Feeding it, igniting it..all being held underneath in the whisper.. God Neva..if anyone knew what was underneath my whisper it would be well interesting to say the least... ;) xxx Excellent write..xx

[Priyanka Natesh]

You are one of the best writers I have ever come across Ma'am! Wonderful thoughts, lovely poem... Thank you so much :)

[∂αʌ<..]

"While time rolls words in the crystal ink of pain"'

im in awe!! magnificent metaphors!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

There is a lot going on under the surface here. The pain deep inside
seems to fight against time when time should heal. Those healing powers
sometimes, just cant keep up with the wounds that collect. This poem
gave me a lot to think about. Bravo!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the third stanza. This poem is beautifully sad with emotions poured out into each line. It is like reading a thought that is passing through a persons mind.