Underneath A Whisper of Darkness

Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle burning
Fear and suspicion caress the flame
Invisible hands of time lay at rest and waiting
Softly murmuring in lines of ink
Across the page

The sound of scars echo in the whisper of darkness
Breathing in the essence of the flame
While time rolls words in the crystal ink of pain
Upon the pages of the heart
That still remains

Experience fades to colors that whisper in the darkness
Softly playing with edges of the flame
As time slowly spreads the ink across the pages
Of an existence eagerly awaiting
To live again

Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle waiting
Within a heart held prisoner by a mind
Caressed by the scars of fear and suspicion
So deeply engraved by invisible
Hands of time

Author's Note

Photography of Eddie O'Bryan

Reviews

[Larry Dyson]

wonderfully chosen words penned just perfectly..suggesting that something else be added or changed..you know Me always wanting to improve...
anyways..
Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle burning
Fear and suspicion caress the flame
Invisible hands of time lay at rest and waiting
Softly murmuring in lines of ink
Across the page

The sound of scars echo in the whisper of darkness
Breathing in the essence of the flame
While time watches words on the pen
slide resolutely down it's shaft
Spreading the crystal ink of pain
Upon the pages of the heart
That still remains..

what if?or is it still what you wish to say?

[bobby]

The last stanza for me summerizes it. The little candle being a soul (for me) Makes us who are are. The mind sets us apart warring our image into something esle. The scars of life melt our open hearts into sealed boxes never meaning to be free.
Life is a parodox in the meaning of life.

[Andreisfree]

...slowly educating Andre...almost missed the inter-linkages between each paragraph...that eureka moment...ahhh...lovely...

[joshua deathdealer]

Another great write. I really enjoyed the flow of this one. Excellent wordage as well and the picture fit perfectly. Well done Neva....xx

[....]

Within a heart held prisoner by a mind
Caressed by the scars of fear and suspicion

These words were amazing and really stood out for me.

[Melobldnfr]

Oh my. I am stunned. Flabbergasted! This is fantastic to me! Imagery at its finest, it's as if I could hear you in it - even your breath! Fabulous!

[FallenWingz]

how do u get it right, each written word always form into a tale....this one was superb...

[Jibin]

That is just amazing you penned it perfectly as the picture.
Nice write dear friend...
:)

[?]

First of all I love the photo.
This was amazing, your are a talented one. lol

love that last stanza, one line inparticular: Within a heart held prisoner by a mind (wow) hmmm how many can relate to just that one line.
Underneath a whisper of darkness, lies a candle waiting
Within a heart held prisoner by a mind
Caressed by the scars of fear and suspicion
So deeply engraved by invisible
Hands of time

[unknown]

Your words are always well chosen, fantastic poem.