Effervesce

Filling and fading with a soft caress
My playmate by the deep
Our memories diminish upon effervesce
Held up the sands of time
They keep

We bind and softly lay them all along
Like small sparks of fire
Out of the mist they are burning strong
Held closely to our soul's
Deepest desires

The dusk of evening, breaks into light
Filling with a soft caress
Memories are found in clouds of night
In the lovely surging foam
Of effervesce

Those sands of time will unbind the fires
My playmate by the deep
Found in our soul's deepest desires
The smallest spark
Will keep













 

Author's Note

*Artist - Victor Bauer - http://www.victorbauer.com/art/beach.htm

Reviews

[Larry Dyson]

really like this part...it rolls well off the tongue.."
"Filling and fading with a soft caress
My playmate by the deep
Our memories diminish (upon) effervesce
Held (up )the sands of time
They keep"

relating to being held by time..held up what do you think?...not correcting just playing withthe turn of phrase.. hope you feel free enough to do this with my writings as well...?

[E.V. Black]

Beautiful as always, Neva. It's true that memories never die as long as they are held close, even when they threaten to fade into foam on the surface of the sea. One has to keep remembering and remembering in order for them to stay with one.

[Poetic Beauty]

Playmate of the deep. That is a stunning line. The imagery is clear and bold and transports me to a different location.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is lovely work. Nourishment with a life giving nature
seems to be a pivotal focus of your poetry. What a treasure.

[EMF]

Wonderfully, straight between the eye's poetry. Like a bullet through the brain, that scrambles your thoughts till it's over.
I liked it. Can't you tell?

[Larry Dyson]

"We bind and softly lay them (lengthwise)
Like small (ember laden bundles)
Out of the mist they are burning strong
Held closely to our soul's
Deepest desires"

[deeps]

This is a wonderful write,
Love the vivd imagery.
Very nicely written.

[Sukriti Suki]

The flow of this piece is really nice...

[Enjoy]

I love the structure of the stanzas; they flow very nicely and it lends itself nicely to this very well-written piece.

I just despise Comic Sans MS. That font is the bane of my existence.

[Audrey Howitt]

I have been off the air for a few days and needed a Neva fix. And here it is! Beautifully written! Form and emotion. Love it.

[Rene Velez]

beautiful images and wonderful words Neva.