Striking Marks In My Life

So it is
if you cannot wait to warm my gaze
she said
Strangers take in beauty
let it lie
Disintegration gets washed into the sea
Thoughts then again……..
Disperse
before your eyes

All of which
is recalled in morning by elements
Dropped
distinctly there at your feet
in pure light
Within all the ways you look at me
Lines are drawn……..
Striking
marks in my life

Author's Note

Artist - Jack Vettriano

Reviews

[Solidad]

I could be completely off mark here but to me this piece comes across like an apologetic lover. It isn't sorry for what its done but more or less sorry for hurting your feelings. Trying to make it better it softens its syllables and speaks with honesty hoping you'll still love it the same way as you did before but understands if you don't. Leaving one with the impression that if you walked away they'd take a piece of you with them.

Like I said that's how I took it. J'adore.

Beautiful work. the feelings of longing and love drip from this, slowly like honey from a fresh cut comb.

[Suzy Q]

I'm kind of out of words at the moment. It was great.

[The Analog Kid]

"Lines are drawn...striking marks in my life." What a great line. Intense. You are really branching out with different styles.

[Arthur Henn]

Not sure what to say, another jar dropping writing - Neva, you amaze me with your style. I like the nine lines, two stanza setting.

This is one of them readings that I could read over and over and read something into it differently and every time it will make me think of something different - Not complaining, my way of saying that's a good thing.

I could read this over and over...

[Audrey Howitt]

I like the shorter lines and how they jab at the reader's eye--so like the "striking marks". So well done!

[lostboy]

what gets washed away..is given back..somewhere ..sometime. mabey in the morning ..mabey in the evening. it will be found.

[Labu]

Great piece. Love it :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

You have such an elegant and clean writing style.
Love destroys the walls that quarantine our souls...
Trusting another with all that we have is a leap of faith
that should inspire the sun to rise just for us.

[unknown]

Love the first stanza, excellent poem :)

[brenda]

wow love the poem a lot neva nice !:)