Striking Marks In My Life

So it is
if you cannot wait to warm my gaze
she said
Strangers take in beauty
let it lie
Disintegration gets washed into the sea
Thoughts then again……..
Disperse
before your eyes

All of which
is recalled in morning by elements
Dropped
distinctly there at your feet
in pure light
Within all the ways you look at me
Lines are drawn……..
Striking
marks in my life

Author's Note

Artist - Jack Vettriano

Reviews

[Solidad]

I could be completely off mark here but to me this piece comes across like an apologetic lover. It isn't sorry for what its done but more or less sorry for hurting your feelings. Trying to make it better it softens its syllables and speaks with honesty hoping you'll still love it the same way as you did before but understands if you don't. Leaving one with the impression that if you walked away they'd take a piece of you with them.

Like I said that's how I took it. J'adore.

[Kat Collins]

First, I can't appreciate this as rap music is playing in the background...so off it goes. Now. As I read again, I am struck by the apologetic, yet fiercly determined stance of the poem. It is a lover who loves, but is drawing lines in the sand, saying enough is enough. Well written, my dear!

[Larry Dyson]

lines are drawn by the actions or lack of them...

[Poetic Beauty]

This is short but still hols amazing imagery. I love the last two lines and this whole piece is done very well.

[Peter Coakley]

Neva, I love your work.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Tough to gauge in terms of meaning, but the emotion is raw and palpable. Marvelous work.

[realmwriter]

To me the apoligee is in the words. With loving eyes and knowing heart! Love it!

[Reviews]

This has a power about it

[Dream Weaver]

One of your shorter ones here Neva., but no
less powerful. Great pic blending perfectly
with this write... Gorgeous piece xx

[∂αʌ<..]

"Lines are drawn……..
Striking
marks in my life"

i love those lines...a stricking poem indeed and very deep as well!

[E.V. Black]

I notice that you seem to be writing about the truth suddenly being revealed and sometimes being unpleasant. I wonder what is going on so that you are writing about such a thing. Still, you write the truth, Neva. Sometimes it's hard to understand, but I always get the gist. :3