Moved As I Remember

My breath hung on the faintest touch,
loving deeply and unashamed.
I gave my soul's secrets to a heart glowing
with a desire to see the gentleness of life
through an obsidian whisper of glass.
A heart that savored heights of happiness
within vibrating rings issued from a sword's blade.

I deeply treasured my appointment within the circular maze of this love
while simultaneously reading the prints
that it left upon my soul.
They were the color my mind dreamed in,
wondrously prompting warm flames for me to fall into.

Phrases walked into places never been before, curving their fingers
around the notes that played the tune of my emotions,
then danced upon pure clouds of captivation.
Unknowingly they created a celestial answer
for these eyes filled with grief.

I am moved as I remember waiting for my skin to be touched
in places where alone had marked complaints
here and there upon my hours.
When ribbons of truth gave passage
my mouth unfolded in a smile that connected
passionately with your own.

Author's Note

Artist - Xie Yu Chu - http://www.jiyougallery.com/Summer-Rose-p14519.html

Reviews

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

What an extremely touching and moving piece. I love when I can relate to the piece and feel the emotions within the write. This one touched me deep..I am moved as I remember waiting for my skin to be touched in places where alone had marked complaints here and there upon my hours. Oh how I can relate to these words. As always Neva wonderful work with your magical pen...
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[brenda]

this is so beautiful and sweet !!!!!!! love it neva!:)

[realmwriter]

I love this. It's perhaps one of the best I have read! Wnderful musings, and gorgeous metaphors, Well done!

Refreshing and heartfelt. Very touching and a piece I can relate to.

[∂αʌ<..]

beautiful poem...it really touched me!

[Maya Storm]

This is a rubik's cube... as are all your poems.
"with a desire to see the gentleness of life"

[Lily Mae]

I love it as a whole but that last stanza just wowed me.. Just perfect...xx

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I loved the "vibrating rings issued from a swords blade".
You totally flooded out the danger with a beautiful
song. This poem was music to my heart.

[kdpgrahi]

A sort of good love poem. Like it

[JohnEWordSlinger]

I love this, see this is why you are so great, smooth, and beautiful poem...
thank you, much appreciated, WS

[E.V. Black]

Absolutely beautiful, as always, Neva. I found it to be tinted with loneliness and wistfulness. It makes me back to what I did today, and that was look over poems written almost a decade ago. I have so many of them, and I have changed so much.

"Phrases walked into places never been before, curving their fingers
around the notes that played the tune of my emotions, "

This was my favorite line and spoke strongly to me. My writing went into places I didn't think I would ever dare to go. Now I visit those destinations quite frequently.

It was a lovely poem that spoke so much to me, especially as I pieced it apart to better understand it.