On the Shores of Creation

We would meet on the shores of creation and walk among the grasses

Embracing the beginning of wondering, while knowing of the fall

From the corners of our being we could see the very key

That fits in the places where alone comes to call

We could hear the brimming hearts drifting full of wishes and secrets

Perhaps holding treasures on winds which spun with courage

Knowing something was amiss where the sky met grace

As they asked, is this love, our eyes find so curious

Rain signs its name on our tender hands, setting fire with its touch

As a distant star sings out that there is fire in healing waters

A thousand thoughts become the body of our stories

Wherein all darkness finds the light that matters

Between seasons, moments held hands with what is and can be

And I believe that perfection sent messages to you and me 

When we met on creation’s shore to walk in grasses

We were held in the arms of our own destiny

Author's Note

Artist: John Pitre - http://marialaterza.blogspot.com/2011/06/john-pitre-new-york-city-surrealist.html

Reviews

[kdpgrahi]

Very creative and optimistic. It is in your unique style of presentation Neva. Everything is in perfect harmony. But can you explain what you mean by 'fire' in the healing waters? A symbol of destruction hidden in every creations?
Power lines are at the end," we are held i the arms of our own destiny" It is so true. I love the poem very mcuh

[Aidz]

In the backgrouns as Im readin gthis is Led Zep Kashmir and the rythme developed as reading is quite the experience, try it :)

[Gomer LePoet]

From ashes to ashes, from dust to dust. everything is born to be destroyed.
it is the accomplishments that we create that defines our destiny.
nice piece Ms. Flores

[Tom Benson]

Once more in your inimitable style you draw the reader in. There was a feeling of pessimism at the start, which rapidly builds to several rays of hope and a fresh optimism.

The final stanza serves to remind us that our future is pretty much in our hands ... as long as we're prepared to go for it. Another thought-provoking piece.

[unknown]

Creation: the beginning of wonderful ventures...great poem!

[Dream Weaver]

A very intense write as well as a
great descriptive piece....

[Maya Storm]

Like the image, like the words... Good match of both.
What a unique thing to say "A thousand thoughts become the body of our stories" I rather enjoyed this piece Neva.

[Rene Velez]

pretty play on words as usual...lol, and I mean that in a good way...proper poem Neva

[w2de35657u687y4324rf]

"We could hear the brimming hearts drifting full of wishes and secrets"
That addition of sensory input is extremely unique. Before I read the next line I had envisioned these sponge-like hearts swaying on the waves of creation. I loved how you mentioned the negative, but never embraced it in your writing as to keep the mood. Well written, excellent in all.

[Morning Star]

Wow beauty and wisdom and a beautiful message
Within this truly powerful poem and the picture perfect with your words
we met on creation’s shore to walk in grasses
We were held in the arms of our own destiny
Its so true Nava
Kudos

[Desert Dreamer]

I feel as if this is written from the future to the present, I feel as if there is a myth being created...I wonder, are we standing on the shores of creation now? This poem really has me thinking. Absolutely beautiful writing!