On the Shores of Creation

We would meet on the shores of creation and walk among the grasses

Embracing the beginning of wondering, while knowing of the fall

From the corners of our being we could see the very key

That fits in the places where alone comes to call

We could hear the brimming hearts drifting full of wishes and secrets

Perhaps holding treasures on winds which spun with courage

Knowing something was amiss where the sky met grace

As they asked, is this love, our eyes find so curious

Rain signs its name on our tender hands, setting fire with its touch

As a distant star sings out that there is fire in healing waters

A thousand thoughts become the body of our stories

Wherein all darkness finds the light that matters

Between seasons, moments held hands with what is and can be

And I believe that perfection sent messages to you and me 

When we met on creation’s shore to walk in grasses

We were held in the arms of our own destiny

Author's Note

Artist: John Pitre - http://marialaterza.blogspot.com/2011/06/john-pitre-new-york-city-surrealist.html

Reviews

[kdpgrahi]

Very creative and optimistic. It is in your unique style of presentation Neva. Everything is in perfect harmony. But can you explain what you mean by 'fire' in the healing waters? A symbol of destruction hidden in every creations?
Power lines are at the end," we are held i the arms of our own destiny" It is so true. I love the poem very mcuh

[leinahtan]

:) it's almost like a song with the melody only created by the beating of my heart as i speak each line in my mind.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

I felt nice and peaceful while reading your poem Neva.
And the picture is so......intriguing...i dunno...its pretty.
"We would meet on the shores of creation and walk among the grasses
Embracing the beginning of wondering, while knowing of the fall"
your opening lines are very welcoming and excite the interest to hold on till the very end.

[realmwriter]

Very nice, I like it a lot. Find myself alone a lot. But there is a way out! Wonderfull paceing, and a fun read, even if a bit melancholy!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work, inspiring to say the least. I love the last stanza.

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
Your poem left me musing for hours, as it is very thought provoking. You approached a subject not often touched and made me stop and ponder. My thoughts went floating much like my pipes smoke in a myriad of directions. I was delighted in so few words you stated volumes.
An excellent write that if read with care with time for reflection begs the reader to ponder the “very key that fits in the places where alone comes to call”.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[joshua deathdealer]

Excellent work!! Love the inspiration.

[Sher{alynn} Veron{ica}]

Bella Neva...

[Inyourshadow]

Embracing the beginning of wondering, while knowing of the fall ~

I love the image you chose for this piece and the powerful statement of this line, could one truly live with such beauty knowing we are the ones that soiled it, or the beauty of romance knowing each kiss could contain goodbye.

The gentleness of the romance sought and found within the line ~

Between seasons, moments held hands with what is and can be

I love how you ask questions from the creations pov ~ is this love ~ this I do not know but what I do know is I love the poetry of this deep poem.
Keep em' coming

[Emily Rae]

i am always moved by the pictures that you associate with your writing, unlike anything I've ever seen...I especially enjoyed the line, "rain signs its name on our tender hands, setting fire with its touch"--how unusual

[Poetic Beauty]

This has beautiful imagery throughout the whole piece. I really like the pictures you have woven with you words in the last stanza.