Becoming Diamonds - Promises Lie Half Asleep

We will rest by the stream in the pages of my letters to you
Worshiping footsteps that fall where no one sees
Waking in the tall grass where promises lie half asleep
Calming in their desire to keep our restful peace

Nothing compares to remembering our kisses, all lit aflame
Never lost to the sight of this woman in my mirror
Invading as a dancing ghost who has stolen truth’s candy
To eat when your presence I still find much dearer

A faint voice combs my hair with a sea of joy for my taking
With no rules to govern our destiny or our fate
Brimming with gems dyed in the sunlight of elements
Seen as crystals leaving stars in their wake

The laws of the moon we can hold in a bowl full of love
Waltzing as young lovers with hearts agleam
Under a hand-written sign of words that steal away
Any idea of what gravity holds and means

There was never one soul that could float on air alone
After passing the doors to gaze upon love
Without feeling cold when outside of the embrace
Of what has been written in the stars above

We will rest by the stream in the pages of my letters to you
Let the earth witness what only our two hearts see
To wake in the tall grass where promises lie half asleep
Becoming the diamonds we were meant to be

Author's Note

Some good ole mushy stuff.......my favorite.

Reviews

[Letemdangle]

This made me think of young love, puppy love and while we are young, not understanding what a wonderful experience we are given. That raw emotion, the empowerment it gives us, is wasted in most cases as they usually end in sadness. To look back they were truly moments of diamonds.

[realmwriter]

Reads like two lovers in a glen. Foreplay is the desert of the day and the are incredibly hungry. Sensual and tame but certainly not timid...!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you RW :)

[realmwriter]

Your welcome N :)

[Veronica Chandler]

Sweets, sweets for my sweet tooth. I really do enjoy the mushy stuff too; warm, soft fuzzies float all around my head. Feel good and happy, happy, joy, joy overflowing.

[☯]

A very descriptive and dreamy poem. The words and images gave a laid-back, and lovely feeling. As if a melody, just singing.
"Brimming with gems dyed in the sunlight of elements
Seen as crystals leaving stars in their wake"
Excellent. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Thats another Gem of a poem you have composed.

I like the last verse really!
"We will rest by the stream in the pages of my letters to you
Let the earth witness what only our two hearts see
To wake in the tall grass where promises lie half asleep
Becoming the diamonds we were meant to be"
I could imagine.

[Audrey Howitt]

Well, how did I miss this one??? Not mushy for me--more magical. It is a world full of magic that you have created here. I may have to keep this in my back pocket and read it whenever I am feeling cynical! Loved it!!

[kdpgrahi]

A love poem. Well done.

[Tom Benson]

Yes mushy it may be Neva, but it's good mushy. It's filled with the emotions and promises of teenage spirit and dreams that the love partnership will go on forever. Having been there, it's a truly wonderful feeling and your choice of expression brought it back clearly. You've cleverly not hinted that it might not be forever which keeps the piece positive. Nice touch.

[Cecelia]

Mushy stuff good!...Enjoyed reading and remembering....Cecelia

[Rene Velez]

beautiful poem Neva, love, it's amazing how many love poems there are

[Liza]

you're talent is romance and inspiration for sure :) the love and passion runs through your pen quite passionately. a very sensual and sensationally awakening piece.