She watches in pleasure as you push away all............
She filled your air pretending to be life-giving water Now you know that she is fire Clouding your vision of the world around you She traded your dreams for her desires
She watched with pleasure as you pushed away all To give her your undivided attention Finding fault in every move that you made Leaving you with no honorable mention
Her warmth and beauty holds you under her spell Stubbornly calling your thirst benign For what now seems like forever a day and a year Yet, of her life-giving water there is no sign
Now you find yourself longingly staring into the air Seeking a tall cool glass of respite To quench your thirst and refresh your dry spirit Restoring your dreams to your sight
Continue seeking life-giving water with great patience Breathe in with the utmost vigilant care In a vessel of a warrior fearless and wise You will find respite………… In the essence of air
Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!
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Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
11 Years Ago
I am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my .. read moreI am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my attention. This one was a pleasure.
As real love gives and does not take from us we should never loose our dreams, our friends or our beliefs for anyone ... and if they loved us they would never expect it so ..beautiful as ever my friend x
So very true, you once again show a mastery at creating a well formed masterpiece, and bring the reader into the story in ways I have found few capable of. I am humbled by the depth your poem reaches my soul.
I love the way you create a romantic dreamscape, the way you capture the absolute feels like a feather brushing against the heart, this is heightened beauty, your words are essense of the poetic winds
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