Steam - Respite In the Essence of Air

Steam - Respite In the Essence of Air

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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She watches in pleasure as you push away all............

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She filled your air pretending to be life-giving water

Now you know that she is fire
Clouding your vision of the world around you
She traded your dreams for her desires

She watched with pleasure as you pushed away all
To give her your undivided attention
Finding fault in every move that you made
Leaving you with no honorable mention

Her warmth and beauty holds you under her spell
Stubbornly calling your thirst benign
For what now seems like forever a day and a year
Yet,  of her life-giving water there is no sign

Now you find yourself longingly staring into the air
Seeking a tall cool glass of respite
To quench your thirst and refresh your dry spirit
Restoring your dreams to your sight

Continue seeking life-giving water with great patience
Breathe in with the utmost vigilant care
In a vessel of a warrior fearless and wise
You will find respite…………
In the essence of air

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
not everything that is beautiful to the eye has your best interest at heart

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Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

11 Years Ago

Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
Veronica Chandler

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yes! Wonderful....if only the beauty outside matched the one inside. Wonderful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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A sitirring, beguiling and maybe dangerous picture... A strong warning in this poem about the perils of desire.. that is never satisfied... often gasping in the warm air

Posted 13 Years Ago


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EMF
I suspect most of us have been unfortunate enough to be the 'victim' in this type of relationship, some of us even the victimiser. But who would be that honest with themselves. This poem is perfect, from the way the title draws you in with a well placed hypen, until the final line. And it doesn't let up. It is not an assault on your emotions, but rather a slow drip on them that wears you down, mirroring the may said relationships do.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I feel as if this was written for me. Of course I know that everyone goes through these types of things but this write really reached out and spoke to me. Thank you for sharing this Neva. I love it as with all your writes.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Love given only to have it slap you in the face and tell you that you are no longer wanted. Rebuilding afterward takes time and strength. This said all of that with a delicacy and beauty.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Seeking a tall cool glass of respite... do you serve these where you work? Love that line

The write to the usual Neva standard :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I find Myself in this position frequently as I see the best and purest motives in the "ONES" who mostly are persuading by appearance instead of heart motives...while air I will always need..."not everything that is beautiful to the eye has your best interest at heart"

Posted 13 Years Ago


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TJ
wonderful piece Neva! superficial appeal is just that...superficial. not everything pretty can meet your needs and enrich your life.

always remember, guns came from fireworks

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Oh how this is so true Neva....excellent!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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...and what we want is rarely what we need. Love the visual of a tall, cool glass of respite, restoring dreams to sight. Beautiful and unerringly, unnervingly accurate, ma'am. Thank you.

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Added on June 11, 2011
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Tags: air, deceit, breath, poetry, selfish, self-serving

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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