She watches in pleasure as you push away all............
She filled your air pretending to be life-giving water Now you know that she is fire Clouding your vision of the world around you She traded your dreams for her desires
She watched with pleasure as you pushed away all To give her your undivided attention Finding fault in every move that you made Leaving you with no honorable mention
Her warmth and beauty holds you under her spell Stubbornly calling your thirst benign For what now seems like forever a day and a year Yet, of her life-giving water there is no sign
Now you find yourself longingly staring into the air Seeking a tall cool glass of respite To quench your thirst and refresh your dry spirit Restoring your dreams to your sight
Continue seeking life-giving water with great patience Breathe in with the utmost vigilant care In a vessel of a warrior fearless and wise You will find respite………… In the essence of air
Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
11 Years Ago
I am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my .. read moreI am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my attention. This one was a pleasure.
Indeed that is very true Neva. "The Devils greatest trick was convincing the world that he doesn't exist...! Be fooled by him if you wish but I can tell that you, like me, are not fooled. You posses a wisdom beyond your years. Your grasp of certain subject matter is nothing if not elegant and refined. "You will find respite in the essence of the air" Excellent poetry Neva...!
Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
11 Years Ago
I am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my .. read moreI am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my attention. This one was a pleasure.
the imagery, movement and play with elements created a beautiful piece - air is a perfect element to show the need and the suffocation - immeasurable to the naked eye but we are always consumed through it.
A vixen who steams the breath of desire with her cunning beauty, only to dry the air and leave it cold and dark. She suffocates her wayward warrior with a lonely pillow devoid of life and her. The essence of air is not enough for the spirit. Moisture withheld, the wayward warrior moves on to atmospheres that offer the water-laden breath of life.
and not everything that is not beautiful to the eye has your best interest at heart. i so love coming around here and reading you. never disappointing and always thought provoking. excellent write!!! def a fav now
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