To Impress

Delicate nets collect on sailing clouds of violet mist
While red leaves twist and spin in turn
Gleaming sparks of dawn cannot be dismissed
As the scattered night sky
Is adjourned

Sweet water gathers in a dream’s own reflection
On a whirling spider’s silvery thread
Morning has broken needing no authentication
See her truth glowing there
In an intricate web

Tiny stones are surrounding sharp blades of grass
Worshiping the presence, they behold
Looking up from the shadows of a looking glass
With their own stories
Still untold

A leaping bass, splashes proudly in a silent pond
Each drop of water expressing its distress
Thinking that the sun was waiting to respond
To his shimmering silence
Used to impress

A single drop of water, a red leaf twisting in the wind
A spider weaving her web to be blessed
Even the tiny stones worshiping their friends
Leap with the bass distressing the pond
To impress

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This is a glittering chain of precious stones; a beautiful description of a day's birth, that special time between dark and light, the was and will be. So many wonderful phrases, ' .. Tiny stones are surrounding sharp blades of grass ~ Worshiping the presence .. ' such a gentle but clear scene.

[Helen]

The birth and worship of a new day in a most impressive lyrical rendering

Wonderfully written Neva

I'm impressed ;-)

[Ruth]

Such resonance! The water, healing and cleansing...perfect metaphor for emotion here :) Beautiful! xx

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A fierce retribution to times gone by, brilliant imagery and sound!

[unknown]

What a great impression it is too, lovely poem :)

[Tate Morgan]

This is the beat i HAVE READ OF YOURS BRAVO LOVE THE RHYME CADENCE AND STORY 100/100

[Forest Green]

You've found a tunneling illustration of the depths of beauty in nature; the secrets that will never be told and the truth in exploration found by sunlight and the brilliant splash from the flipping fin of a bass.

Exellent...!

[Alicia Hirshey]

Neva, This was amazing. Like you were telling the story to me out of a storybook. I love it.