Delicate nets collect on sailing clouds of violet mist, while red leaves twist and spin in turn............
Delicate nets collect on sailing clouds of violet mist While red leaves twist and spin in turn Gleaming sparks of dawn cannot be dismissed As the scattered night sky Is adjourned
Sweet water gathers in a dream’s own reflection On a whirling spider’s silvery thread Morning has broken needing no authentication See her truth glowing there In an intricate web
Tiny stones are surrounding sharp blades of grass Worshiping the presence, they behold Looking up from the shadows of a looking glass With their own stories Still untold
A leaping bass, splashes proudly in a silent pond Each drop of water expressing its distress Thinking that the sun was waiting to respond To his shimmering silence Used to impress
A single drop of water, a red leaf twisting in the wind A spider weaving her web to be blessed Even the tiny stones worshiping their friends Leap with the bass distressing the pond To impress
This is a glittering chain of precious stones; a beautiful description of a day's birth, that special time between dark and light, the was and will be. So many wonderful phrases, ' .. Tiny stones are surrounding sharp blades of grass ~ Worshiping the presence .. ' such a gentle but clear scene.
Posted 13 Years Ago
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the imagery just has me lost...
I like the idea of the pond to impress and the web. It sets up the poem for the perfect setting and gives just the right image for me. Everything I was thinking has been said already, but seriously, awesome job!
Interesting observation of nature. It's amazing what can be seen in nature when one holds one's breath. I think nature is one of the most inspirational things out there. I can see that you gleaned much of your inspiration from it. :)
Beautiful imagery and cool use of personification. I love how the bass "leaps to impress." I find that very cute. :D
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