Separately the Same

Restlessly, he is sitting home all alone
Pulling one petal off at a time
From a flower he has safely hidden away
In the farthest reaches of his mind

With each petal pulled, he says aloud to himself
She loves me, she loves me not
An old childhood game he sits and plays
He thought he had forgot

Miles away she sits restlessly, home all alone
Playing that same old childhood game
He loves me, she says, as she pulls a petal
Then softly whispers his name

He wonders if she ever thinks of him
When she is all alone
She loves me not, he says, pulling a petal
Deciding, he should not phone

He is all she ever thinks and dreams about
Those nights she spends alone
Pulling off petals from that flower in her mind
Always praying that he will phone

He loves me, she loves me not
Pulling petals, in the game
She loves me, He loves me not
Separately, the same

Author's Note

Time wasted by miscommunication.............

Reviews

[fargone]

this is very strong, neva. a perfectly painted picture of sadness and mutual futility. the writing is inevitably splendid, of course. on this occassion, i think that the link between them of the "childish game" is a very clever idea and it works really well. one of ur best for me, my friend :)

[Sukriti Suki]

This one is good...joined together by a game..which eventually becomes the game of life...I enjoyed this, simple yet hits the right tone.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I love the way you closed the gap between time and space in this poem.
The bond between the two couldnt be stronger if they were in the same
room.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a well-constructed poem about miscommunication, Neva.. I love the two separate people doing the same thing.. seems that now and again, we all look back on the regrets of a relationship from out past, always wondering.. pondering, what if. Great job!

[LA Lorena]

Neva, this hits so close to home, it is almost too painful to read. A brilliant depiction of the communication, or miscommunication between two.

[What happened to simple..]

Damn, how stupidly true this is, haha. What's wrong with us humans? We don't take enough risks. Loved it =) xx

[brenda]

this is super sweet and just makes me think about so many things great write !

[Lily Mae]

This is so true. I couldn't agree more.. Excellent write Neva.. a favorite for sure...x