For years, I guess the glass I used to see me on the outside Revealed a clear sky that sang at one timid glance From an occasional nod, I called my own In some remembrance of this cross I wear For my thousandth second chance
I wonder if the truth of my mortality has chosen now to meet With the knowledge lifted from this Phoenix’s ashes Or is it just as plain as the untouched places Where loneliness now gives rise and fancy strays To self-inflict a thousand lashes
I look once again into the glass and I see me on the inside Full of love and the wonder of here and now With the occasional nod, I call my own I bravely cross the line I drew in sand so long ago Walk within the shadows of why and how
i like how this poem leaves a lot up to the reader to interpret,
there are some awesome lines,
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I look once again into the glass and I see me on the inside
Full of love and the wonder of here and now
With the occasional nod, I call my own
I bravely cross the line I drew in sand so long ago
Walk within the shadows of why and how,'
i think it's a poem of promise neva,
great write!
Posted 13 Years Ago
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This is the perfect poem for me right now. Left me speechless.
I like: "Where loneliness now gives rise and fancy strays
To self-inflict a thousand lashes"
This makes me ponder a lot of things. Walking within the shadows of why and how, if you will. I see religion in this, which speaks to me more with the mortality and the Phoenix's ashes. Great write, as always :)
"I bravely cross the line I drew in sand so long ago"
These words resonated deeply and now vibrate inside me. I enjoy reading your work and I jumpped back in to re-read, which signals my own interest and delight. Lovely work Neva!
Though not a Christian, I've been born again so many times I've given Great Spirit stretch marks...a thousand second chances, aye. The last two lines of the second stanza left their mark on me. And "...the shadows of why and how" is simply, stunningly brilliant. Well done, Neva.
Simply breathtaking.. your poems always touch me on so many levels that I come away emotionally, mentally and creatively amazed. The imagery of the glass, the mirror, is well worked throughout this poem. Great job!
Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia.
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