If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon.......
If I told you I am afraid of dust that catches in places where I am tired Would you still find me so amazing and fun If I said what I think to those who have ears to hear When I looked into your eyes Would I still be the one
If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon Will you still love me and the melody I create Because no matter how my song plays; we can move on To all those bright clouds We anticipate
If I struggled to find words that washed over your skin like silk That lingered dreamily in the light of your morning Would you still hear the same sweet voice when I am tired And afraid of dust that catches in places On words I am forming
I think once you have love for someone, your always going have it. It might change form such as e.i when I was young and "in love with my first girlfriend when I was just in 8th grade and wanted to be her boyfirend. As now 4years later, I still love her just as much I just love her in a different way, as a friend. I think once loved is like matter, it can never be destoyed. However it can be created. Anyway I like you poem it quetoins the peroson if they really love you for you are or for what you can do. Good work!=)
'If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon
Will you still love me and the melody I create
Because no matter how my song plays; we can move on
To all those bright clouds
We anticipate'
Another great read Neva. This is a poem that I understand fully and I love it all the more because of it. Great job again.
My first thought was, "What a beautiful painting!", but then as I read it's beauty grew with the enhancement of the lovely words. The flow was melodic, almost like a lullaby, though more morose. Very beautiful and poetic! Great job!!!
I especially like the lines,
"If I said what I think to those who have ears to hear
When I looked into your eyes
Would I still be the one."
Makes me think of pillow talk, in a half asleep state. Very bitter sweet, but lovely nonetheless!!!! :D:D:D:D Loved it!
I think the title should be different....but the poem, is really good..I can totally relate to it..yes, the words we speak might be bitter but the love inside is true.
Of course I'd still love you, sometimes you have to hear things you don't like, but it's always better to hear them from a friend. *Smile* Your words flow so well together, they're like mismatched puzzle pieces you scavaged over deserts to find and fit together. ~ BlackCl0ud
If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon
Will you still love me and the melody I create
Because no matter how my song plays; we can move on
To all those bright clouds
We anticipate
Interesting and true. The biggest fear is that when someone finds out who you really are, will they still look at you the same way?
It's written very, very well. Another amazing, true, hits right home, write.
Neva,
We all have bad days....it's the essence of you that matters...love me for who I am....and understand when I am not all that you want...It's reality...a part of life..and we're all learning as we go along...
Another terrific write, Neva. Something I just come to expect.
Allen
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