For Tate Morgan..........one that rhymes...........
Through rain that sounds on hills of tiny moments Somewhere beneath a faithful plea We act out in the deepest shades of gray As intellects passing in cascades Of sailing ecstasy
Poets reflecting secret words which breathe in joy Hiding our thoughts in perfect prose Until the heavens embrace our smiling sun And we speak in tongues That we chose
With full cups of dreams from our imaginations Step by step we advance on shores Until all your thoughts rhyme in emotions And all those tiny moments Become yours
Sometimes the words are a perfect ryhme and sometimes the words are just a barely labouring stuttering prose.... But each word is perfect that comes before or after.... it depends how the author chose...
This flows like a silken waterfall over rocks smoothed by time...
I like some rhyme.. not usually though so much seems forced by some, me for one, so i don't rhyme.
This poem is gorgeous in words and message i find within it.
"Poets reflecting secret words which breathe in joy
Hiding our thoughts in perfect prose
Until the heavens embrace our smiling sun
And we speak in tongues
That we chose"
This poem really just tells all about writing. Our tiny moments. Great poem!
I do (love rhymes)...not forced at all...you painted the perfect picture, as you always
do...always.
You Nevar disappoint...However,
I wished all those tiny moments
became "ours..."not "yours"
you slipped from ours to yours in the last stanza...
I like happy endings..
that being said....I loved the poem
I love anything you write, whether it rhymes or not! You are so talented, truly Neva! As always your words move me and make me think. I think you deserve a 1000 for this, alas, I can only give you a 100! Much love to you!
I like the rhymes that you make not because they have a nice rhythm but because they are creative, you arent one to rhyme hat with cat. I love your imagery to no end and I think your writing is awesome. Ps, love the picture that goes with this
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