Tough

Tough

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
"

Take a safari on the icing of your own cake.............

"

Make haste upon the wind of your questions
Purge that glimmer of trust
Flattery, will get you nowhere fast
Once I confirm, you are not
One of us

Take a  safari on the icing of your own cake
Then cut me a slice or two
You can get overly sentimental, if you like
While I have your cake
And eat it too

Shut off the valve to your bleeding heart
No pity is needed here
I ride bareback on all my trials
Been roughing it
For years

Go ahead and apply your salve to all those wounds
You have been rubbing all that salt in
I wear a shield of aiming intention

That I call my tough
Thick skin


© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Just having a little fun with the flip side of my personality......

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these words come across in my mind with a certain force or almost flippancy to them. This works so well with the pace of the poem, and keeps the reader engaged from the first line to the last. I love the line "I wear a shield of aiming intention" great poetry!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Flip side indeed! I was scratching my head just seeing the title and your name beside it in my RR this morning. This poem, though well done, is just so anti-Neva. Don't get me wrong, I like it, really, it just is so not like anything you've done before here. Someone has been colouring outside the lines, and while I like it, I'm just rather surprised.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well :) I like your flip side also. You say it like it is and with a graceful touch :) x

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ouch! The pen is truly mightier than the sword!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is such a strong voice here, you truly capture the myth, majesty and magic of the femme fatale. The characterisation is superb guaranteeing your persona has an incredibily strong voice. I like how you mix the metaphysical and tangible, for instance:

Shut off the valve to your bleeding heart
No pity is needed here
I ride bareback on all my trials

Also, like the way you take well-established, collequail symbols, like "have your cake and eat it" and elevate them to a poetic level.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

these words come across in my mind with a certain force or almost flippancy to them. This works so well with the pace of the poem, and keeps the reader engaged from the first line to the last. I love the line "I wear a shield of aiming intention" great poetry!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Bold and innotive, a simplistic look at magic and fun, well done, good read

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thats always fun to experiment! this turns out to be a very well written piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

No matter what you are saying, one thing is always consistent... you say it eloquently. Well written and wonderful to read! Thanks Neva!

~Megan

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Definatley the yang :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Sounds as if you are telling someone to shove it! I think your writing is beautiful as i have said many times but what is once more?
"You can get overly sentimental, if you like
While I have your cake
And eat it too"... love it!

Chloe


Posted 13 Years Ago



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Tags: pity, questions, trust, sentimental

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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