Take a safari on the icing of your own cake.............
Make haste upon the wind of your questions Purge that glimmer of trust Flattery, will get you nowhere fast Once I confirm, you are not One of us
Take a safari on the icing of your own cake Then cut me a slice or two You can get overly sentimental, if you like While I have your cake And eat it too
Shut off the valve to your bleeding heart No pity is needed here I ride bareback on all my trials Been roughing it For years
Go ahead and apply your salve to all those wounds You have been rubbing all that salt in I wear a shield of aiming intention
these words come across in my mind with a certain force or almost flippancy to them. This works so well with the pace of the poem, and keeps the reader engaged from the first line to the last. I love the line "I wear a shield of aiming intention" great poetry!
Take a safari on the icing of your own cake
Then cut me a slice or two
You can get overly sentimental, if you like
While I have your cake
And eat it too
I love it - I'll never look at another slice of cake the same way
You've done a great job integrating common phrases with pure emotions...your cadence, rhythm and style along with great phrasing makes your poem ebb and flow like a river running through it...Another excellent write.
Allen
Wow...Samurai Neva!! You have kept the edgy side well sheathed all this time. Come visit the darkness more often...so long as it doesn't cost you too much. I like it when you cut to the chase like this. Well done.
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