Chained to Here and Gone

Chains quiver under the tongue of flames then lie dead to you
So how can they still sing to me until I cannot forget?
That the grip of time will never end
And even if I go away my lips will smile
With blinded eyes

A shell of seclusion asks at last if I miss those possibilities
Of your constant sifting through my soul and mind
Until hope is no longer a dream
And your flames breathe upon the petals
Chained in ecstasy

The gifts I wish away are still mine to have and know
Held by a single hand with no magical wand
Yet I seem to view the dawn
As a strange rain that brings me gloom
Chained to here and gone

If chains quiver under the tongue of flames then lie dead to you
What is this voice I carry inside my heart to remain?
When all it seems merely waits for me
To release my tears and sweetly smile again
Blinded to the chains

Reviews

[Solidad]

"A shell of seclusion asks at last if I miss those possibilities
Of your constant sifting through my soul and mind
Until hope is no longer a dream
And your flames breathe upon the petals
Chained in ecstasy "

I quote various parts of your work because these are my favorites. I think there is a reality hidden within your words. One that I can sit as a bystander and watch the cogs move with grace. I'm a big fan of your writing and not because of your extensive vocabulary that is woven together like that of a songbird (that goes without saying.) but because you cater very well to your audience. I look forward to more RRs from you. J'adore.

[Sel Whiteley]

A stunningly powerful poem that reminds me of Rosseau's "man is born free, but everywhere he is in chains". The symbol of being chained is so potent and emotionally charged and you are able to employ that for poetic advantage, superb!

[Dream Weaver]

Chains alone are a powerful image, yet to be shackled to
them, takes on a more tormented feel to be set free from
someone or something. Nicely done....

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very intense concept, fantastic work

[Aidz]

Touching the darkness agian, but not fully enveloping...... good write ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

sometimes we allow our past mistakes to cloud our vision in the present tha causes us to make more mistakes or miss opportunities we don't see.

[Tate Morgan]

pain brings out the mos beautiful works such as this

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[Lucy]

Words can't describe your... Words, really. It takes talent to put characters on a page, but it takes even longer to make those characters flow into beautiful music, to sing as your writing does.

[LA Lorena]

Another marvelous write, exquisite imagery, and perfectly flowing words....I'm really running out of novel ways to say how much I like what you write. How about posting something crappy for a change so I can mix up the adjectives a little? ;)