Breath of a Rose

Is there no breath in a glowing rose's dream

After the night has scattered

None so fair warms a heart it seems

Or equals a breath

That matters

When the night is over in a golden sense

Climbing up above the sea

Would you care or take offense

If a dreaming rose

Could no longer breathe

What follows until the last light shines

Within all your memories

Inside small spaces are you so inclined

To be the dreaming rose

That still breathes

Do you dream willingly, continuing to bloom

After the night has scattered

As you take each breath do you presume

That which warms your heart

To be what matters

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Interesting, for sure. A rose dreaming is certainly a unique image, and yet, it makes sense. As with all your poems, the imagery is spellbinding. However, I feel your urge to rhyme in this poem has disrupted the flow somewhat. That doesn't detract from the poem, though. Great work!

[CalebSchadeck]

as always great imagery, nicely done, I did feel the poem ended kinda abruptly though it could use another stanza, but a very well done job!

[Forest Green]

Your final stanza is the rose in full bloom, so far as imagery blended with poetry goes...very moving, soft and delicately rhymed.

Nice work...!

[BlackCl0ud]

There's never the pressure of rhyme in your writing, it's actually quite blessful. The message is strong and has an excellent amount of impact on the reader. ~ BlackCl0ud

[Sukriti Suki]

I read this twice to get the full impact...The will to dream tested here..Like this one as well.

[Robin]

love the use of soft rhyme here , beautiful as always .

[Maggie]

Roses and dreams meld together into one. You have a talent for taking two totally different things and making them mirror images.

[Letemdangle]

I love how you make all things come alive.

[brenda]

beautifully written:) i can relate to it keep on writing!:)

[fargone]

of course, u never disappoint, neva. beautiful mixed images and metaphors which almost leave the senses reeling. excellent :)

[LA Lorena]

Another lovely write, seems you are full of them. Well written,lovely rhyming, and vivid imagery. You know your style and you know it well!