Until

Even as you leave my presence, I must collect my heart
And softly weave my memories one by one
On the edges, they quietly sit apart
Until I say to myself
I am done

If the ocean could overhear, the memories I recall
I could throw a net reaching out for miles
Capture every bit of love as it falls
To join the lines of our hearts
In my smile

All along the blue skies, in the shadows of the sun
Inside of these memories, I could spend days
Traveling through my heart’s caverns
Inhaling a touch left trailing
Of the things you say

Even as you leave my presence, I must collect my heart
Draw back time enough to sweetly examine
The joy all these memories will impart
Until I say to myself
I am done

Reviews

[Joel M Frye]

Wow...did you nail this one, Neva!!!!

You have the advantage, my dear...when this happened to me, there was the half-hour crying jag before I was able to collect my heart at all. If I didn't know better, I'd have to say you were there in my apartment that night...or more precisely, you were in my soul that night. Cut me to the quick, this one, with surgical precision and supreme artistry. Thank you.

[Vanessa Rico]

I definitely been there and was most certainly done with that! You always learn more about yourself when you go through something that difficult. You learn about strength and I know you are a strong woman!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Letting go is the hardest thing to do but necessary in order to find a future... this poem could have ben my anthem after my divorce.

[Hayley]

The second stanza gave me the most beautiful imagery, and the closing stanza gives the perfect ending. This is perfectly constructed, perfectly captured the emotion, and is just perfectly perfect!

[BlackCl0ud]

This poem made me smile, while I read I imagined an artist painting these words into a heart with ink veins. I never tire of your writing Flores and I never think I will. ~BlackCl0ud

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Simply speechless write. BeautifuL!

[Aidz]

nice ....... great write once again

[brenda]

wow i wish i could do that with my heart now mend it together again so i canbe strong to face him i love it and i can realte it to it:)

[Rediscovery]

I enjoyed the rhyme scheme in his poem. And I also like the imagry and the message itself. Great piece of work.

[Sri Gawn Tu Fahr]

ummmmmm..... your gentle flowing imagery has collected my heart ....I love the way you write.... so sweet and sublime...

[HopelesslyDevoted]

great writing!! your amazing!