Until

Even as you leave my presence, I must collect my heart
And softly weave my memories one by one
On the edges, they quietly sit apart
Until I say to myself
I am done

If the ocean could overhear, the memories I recall
I could throw a net reaching out for miles
Capture every bit of love as it falls
To join the lines of our hearts
In my smile

All along the blue skies, in the shadows of the sun
Inside of these memories, I could spend days
Traveling through my heart’s caverns
Inhaling a touch left trailing
Of the things you say

Even as you leave my presence, I must collect my heart
Draw back time enough to sweetly examine
The joy all these memories will impart
Until I say to myself
I am done

Reviews

[Joel M Frye]

Wow...did you nail this one, Neva!!!!

You have the advantage, my dear...when this happened to me, there was the half-hour crying jag before I was able to collect my heart at all. If I didn't know better, I'd have to say you were there in my apartment that night...or more precisely, you were in my soul that night. Cut me to the quick, this one, with surgical precision and supreme artistry. Thank you.

[roy mccarthy]

this is lovely poem neva,
it flows perfectly too!

[Letemdangle]

Emotion with strength a hard combo. You do it wonderfully here.

Very creative and heartfelt poem. Each stanza reads as a poem unto itself. I like the connecting of the first and last stanza.

[Daniel Atkinson]

The last line left a strong impact. This is a great poem.

[Pollyanna]

Once again, you have painted a gorgeous painting, a true work of art. Wonderful!

[fargone]

expertly and beautifully woven, as ever, dear friend :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Extremely well written, with imagery that bites, flows perfectly with a sense of sultry inhibition, well done!

[Gomer LePoet]

great job as always Neva. you collect everyone's heart with your words time after time. I'm thinking this is a 12-string ballad maybe done by the Wailing Jenny's.
good job lady.

[LA Lorena]

This is sure to resonate with many...I know it does with me. Well crafted and just flows like a dream.

[Ladysue]

honestly I think you could be a great song writer...this flows so well and with amazing artistry...this was awesome...