Whole

I glimpse your eyes staring at the shadows in my soul
Seeking to calm the wildly rushing storm
Keeping my heart out of control
Unable to keep
The beat
Pulsating whole

I stare into eyes seeking to calm the storms
To make my heart their own
Leaving chambers once cold now warm
My heart begins to pulsate
To the beat
Of a song, its always known

Buried longings softly rush, to be finally freed
From this heart out of control
Once a half now pulsates complete
Your eyes chase shadows
Calming storms,
My heart
Returns to whole

Author's Note

Artist Laurie Blank

Reviews

[Jibey]

This is lovely writing,, melodious and touching in its simple expression of unaffected love... The clever structure of each verse enabled the writing to have strength and control - maybe fitting for a poem with control as its theme...but enabling the central image of calming and freeing the storm of feeings to work so well...

I'm sorry I'm analysing... I see from your Author's note that you are more interested to know if such writing touches the soul.... It does.

[Seshat Nidaba]

This is epic, I'm forever trying to write a piece like this, about our coherent unity.

[Kim]

This is such a most lovely read Neva,
I really enjoyed this write.

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you have a real touch for a romantic notion, I feel totally carried away in the emotion of the piece..wishing for a little of that :)

[Zachary_James]

This is amazing i love the rhyme. Neva you write stunning poems, and this is one of them. Beautifully done.

[Larry Dyson]

I'm awake at this early hour.. nicely written and expressive.. what happened to initiate this poem?

[joshua deathdealer]

This is quite melodic and soothing. I like the construction and as always..
I love your work..xx

[Inyourshadow]

Almost reads like a song a travalling minstral wound have sung with his lyre or mandolin. The natural flow and gentleness of the piece is wonderful as it comes full circle leaving you whole for is this not what one wishes for from love and life to be made whole. Loved it, keep em' coming

[EMF]

Lady... you take a november morning, frost on the ground and frostbite in my feet and make it warm. Beautifuly written and with such melody that it lifts my soul on your song. Captivating and sublime

[Bridgid Persephone Newm..]

Harmonies of divine revelation, my dear! Good job.

[Coyote Poetry]

Ain't easy to find peace and a complete heart. Always a piece is left somewhere. The heart become tattoos with memories and stories. I believe in the end. We learn what we really need. I like the strong language and powerful statements in this poem.
"Buried longings softly rush, to be finally freed
From this heart out of control"
Amazing words and story made this poem a pleasure to read. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote