Shadows Across a Tear-Stained Floor

Shattered windows and broken doors,

cast shadows across a tear-stained floor.

Broken dishes speak to silent walls

while unheard words cry out

that should be understood by all.

Nothing's left to see in these eyes of mine,

because life has frozen

all I ever hoped to find.

I write and search for a stream of memories,

but find no words that won't scar me.

My hands reach out with a shaking pen

composing a message in the dark once again.

Tonight I scratch on my skin

words of love

that should have never been.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Immense wretchedness, utter sorrow, drips from every line.. so sad, so finely created. A love and emotion like this is devastating, spaces and sides with different rules -if there are any at all.. perhaps not. You've always had a poet's true reason for placing words just so.. sighhh

Is a while since you...

[Frieda P]

Sounds like an illicit love affair and regrets, always an elegant & emotionally charged read from your pen Neva.

[dillonjensen]

I had to read this twice to make sure my interpretation was what I thought it was. I give you kudos for that, because it's not all too often that I have to read a poem twice to think about what it means to me. I really like the image you have painted for me in my head, and I say that because it reminds me of something that is so pure and innocent-love-but yet it can be so devastating when we take it for granted. Another thing this poem did for me was reassure my view on the creation of things, tangible and intangible, and that the creation is not the problem, it's how the user uses them.

[Lily Finch]

wowwwwwww beautifuly piece... 100/100 ;)

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Beautifully sad. Very well done.

[Sami Khalil]

"Nothing's left to see in these eyes of mine,



because life has frozen



all I ever hoped to find.



I write and search for a stream of memories,



but find no words that won't scar me."
So many things can shatter us and so many hurts can scar us for life. Love has its share of those , its ups and downs . I hope we don't get frozen in time...A splendid read and write....:)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The way you say the words in the poem...all the shattered windows and broken doors...paints a picture of emotions...yet they are immaterial and can be replaced...yet the hardest in the inner lining that is damaged and takes time to heal...I always says it's easier to destroy something...yet that makes it harder to rebuild a foundation from the ground up...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

You read me well, emotions it is. Thank you for the review

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...you phrased this with an intent...good to read you...

[Pól]

beautiful
damn these 25 characters!!

[Zachary_James]

Bravo Neva, this is utterly stunning, a very beautiful piece of art.