Spinning 'Round Here Insane

No matter which notes are played on still waters

they weigh heavy on my pain

when they fall.

There are days when I realize

I am spinning 'round

and murmuring,

feeling forced and raw.

It seems that time dwindles down

into its own sea

then wakes the night

asking to be filled with hours.

Everything I do

seems to make time kiss the places

where I spin,

stroking........

as it devours.

I can feel a searing look

from eyes on the sidelines

when I attempt to hold the jewels of darkness

next to me.

Their footsteps

are like the million curses of tears,

stinging..........endlessly.

Before the door closes on my life's journey

I know the moon will rise

in all its angelic innocence

once again.

Until then, I will dream

of polishing those jewels,

spinning round

here......

insane.

Author's Note

Photo Manipulation by Kirsten Keller aka Lhianne

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again.
Until then, I will dream
of polishing those jewels,
spinning round
here......"
You style is of elegance and aloofness of spirit. You make the words alive and the images to dance in our minds. Something that is unique in all your writes...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure ...You are welcome...:)

[Jack...]

Neva, this was beautiful and well worth the wait. I loved your rhyming pattern and the feel of this poem. You have captured hopes and dreams of one heart in an endless sea of thoughts.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Jack :)

[Poussiere D'Ange]

The last paragraph was beautiful and i LOVED it. On the whole, the poem was very well penned and had a great imagery. A wonderful piece:-):-):-D.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you PDA :)

[Talal Hussain]

This composition has been carved so beautifully by you...its such a joy to read :-)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Talal :)

[Frieda P]

No matter what we do or say, sometimes it's never enough...so many brilliant lines in this one Neva....it resonates under my very skin.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Frieda :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Before the door closes on my life's journey
I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again. "
The above lines were my favorite. Life seem like a spinning wheel sometimes. Always moving and never know where we will land. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Coyote :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"everything i do seems to kiss the places/ where i spin/ stroking/ as it devours"

that line kissed me square on the lips and ate me up...great stuff.

sometimes we spin everywhere but don't land where we want to...

everyone keeps us turning looking for answers...our head gets so filled up it drives us insane.

others judge us...they don't understand...their eyes always upon us...as we seize the darkness and try to make sense out of it.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Jacob :)

[redflutterby]

Your style on this one is superb. Each word pulls me to the end. I can relate to spinning around insane...I do it all the time. ;-)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you, hope you don't answer yourself like I do..he he

[redflutterby]

Lol...are you kidding? When I write I sit around muttering the dialogue between the characters...then review myself. ;-)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

holy cow! LOL!

[redflutterby]

Lol....it does help to hear the words aloud. ;-)