Spinning 'Round Here Insane

No matter which notes are played on still waters

they weigh heavy on my pain

when they fall.

There are days when I realize

I am spinning 'round

and murmuring,

feeling forced and raw.

It seems that time dwindles down

into its own sea

then wakes the night

asking to be filled with hours.

Everything I do

seems to make time kiss the places

where I spin,

stroking........

as it devours.

I can feel a searing look

from eyes on the sidelines

when I attempt to hold the jewels of darkness

next to me.

Their footsteps

are like the million curses of tears,

stinging..........endlessly.

Before the door closes on my life's journey

I know the moon will rise

in all its angelic innocence

once again.

Until then, I will dream

of polishing those jewels,

spinning round

here......

insane.

Author's Note

Photo Manipulation by Kirsten Keller aka Lhianne

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again.
Until then, I will dream
of polishing those jewels,
spinning round
here......"
You style is of elegance and aloofness of spirit. You make the words alive and the images to dance in our minds. Something that is unique in all your writes...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure ...You are welcome...:)

[non_sane]

Beautiful...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you non_sane :))

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Oh my God, this is divine. No words.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Mehak :)

[Tate Morgan]

This is the best from you so far and the deepest as well . i felt this one .

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Tate :)

[Emerald Seas]

Lovely writing, Neva. Lost within pain, feeling the world continue on around us, as inner turmoil weighs on the spirit. I felt it all in this splendid writing. You also seem to find the most amazing pictures to post with your work. A great selection for this one, too.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you QSS :)

[Mark]

Ethereal, clouds spinning into and out of themselves. I feel an urgency, a panic as well as resignation and acceptance in this write. Very strange but as wonderful as most of your writing is dear heart!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Mark :)

[RachelReaper]

I love the theme of this, the competing light and dark with the other themes of water and a lover. This was absolutely beautiful. If poem could be a supermodel, your's would be world famous, I swear.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you RR :)

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

"Before the door closes on my life's journey
I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again.
Until then, I will dream
of polishing those jewels,
spinning round
here......
insane."

Love this final stanza, giving the imagery of almost a craftsman working in an obsessive manner...polishing jewels that have consumed them completely in their beauty...A beauty and glamor that drives one to the edge...A double edged sword in a sense...The paradox of what seemed precious becoming one of horror...

Very nice write. Look forward to more

LW

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Lone Wolf :)

[quinfinn]

odd, isn't it, when we can find the calm in places where no one else might look. and we can not find it in places where others go to do so. so we "dream of polishing those jewels, spinning round here...insane." you're a powerful writer, always i am impressed by you. thank you for sharing again!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Quinfinn :)

[quinfinn]

always here for you, Neva.....you're welcome!

[Becky C Strukamp]

A beautiful calming write, Just what I needed this morning. To me this poem is one of hope. Thanks for sharing your talent!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Becky :)