Spinning 'Round Here Insane

No matter which notes are played on still waters

they weigh heavy on my pain

when they fall.

There are days when I realize

I am spinning 'round

and murmuring,

feeling forced and raw.

It seems that time dwindles down

into its own sea

then wakes the night

asking to be filled with hours.

Everything I do

seems to make time kiss the places

where I spin,

stroking........

as it devours.

I can feel a searing look

from eyes on the sidelines

when I attempt to hold the jewels of darkness

next to me.

Their footsteps

are like the million curses of tears,

stinging..........endlessly.

Before the door closes on my life's journey

I know the moon will rise

in all its angelic innocence

once again.

Until then, I will dream

of polishing those jewels,

spinning round

here......

insane.

Author's Note

Photo Manipulation by Kirsten Keller aka Lhianne

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again.
Until then, I will dream
of polishing those jewels,
spinning round
here......"
You style is of elegance and aloofness of spirit. You make the words alive and the images to dance in our minds. Something that is unique in all your writes...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure ...You are welcome...:)

[YouoweYoupay]

First line is dark and lovely. I could see the ripples of the notes on the surface of a pond. There is graceful spinning of a beautiful body, yet a deeply disturbed heart. The footsteps I suppose are the ill-luck strikes and human misjudgements. Being councious of one's insanity kind of cancells everything out. You are well, and sane. But you just need some more time to adjust to the darkness. Thank you for posting. Keep writing.

-Rain.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Rain.........

[Layla J Omorose]

Another beautifully written poem Neva. I can picture the narrator (for some reason) spinning around in a circle, arms stretched out as they are creating this poem. Lost in their own thoughts and problems, wanting to be free from their burdens and pain. Great work as always.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Layla :))

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, a great poem and nicely written. I don't know how will I interpret this but I like the idea and how you wrote it. Thanks for writing and continue to work wonders (:

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Rhianne, poetry, music, painings, art in general is personal Personal to the creator and personal to the reader, listener, singer, viewer etc. No worries about the interpretation, it is what you make of it, what I make of it and whatever anyone else makes of it. Isn't art awesome? Thanks!

[Rhianne Ney]

Art really is awesome~!

[Pax]

your words dances on beautiful hues of sadness my friend ~ starts with sadness but i see always a glimmer of hope in the end... the last stanzas are my favorite lines :)
Great work as always :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Pax :)

[Rebecca Buller]

"It seems that time dwindles down into its own sea, then wakes the night asking to be filled with hours." Wow, Neva. Your work is simply stunning. So vivid. So descriptive. I had to read it a second time in order to fully adsorb the depth of its beauty. Thank you for sharing it with us and I look forward to reading even more of your work.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Time has a way of slipping away. We must live like there's no tomorrow because we never know if tomorrow will be. We can plan ahead but we must live in the here and now. Life has many a curve ball it can throw.

[Corset]

Such a powerful mesmerizing write, I especially loved the last two stanzas, the poem makes the picture instead of vice versa, beautiful as only a certain kind of insanity can be, Cheers!

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Pain, felt...
Beautifully fantasized ...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow! very dreamy and whimsical, you dragged me in the realm of continuity, I love the dark tone of this piece, truly a remarkable write. thanks for sharing Neva :).

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you M&M :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Truly angelic...its amazing :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Yas :)