Spinning 'Round Here Insane

No matter which notes are played on still waters

they weigh heavy on my pain

when they fall.

There are days when I realize

I am spinning 'round

and murmuring,

feeling forced and raw.

It seems that time dwindles down

into its own sea

then wakes the night

asking to be filled with hours.

Everything I do

seems to make time kiss the places

where I spin,

stroking........

as it devours.

I can feel a searing look

from eyes on the sidelines

when I attempt to hold the jewels of darkness

next to me.

Their footsteps

are like the million curses of tears,

stinging..........endlessly.

Before the door closes on my life's journey

I know the moon will rise

in all its angelic innocence

once again.

Until then, I will dream

of polishing those jewels,

spinning round

here......

insane.

Author's Note

Photo Manipulation by Kirsten Keller aka Lhianne

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again.
Until then, I will dream
of polishing those jewels,
spinning round
here......"
You style is of elegance and aloofness of spirit. You make the words alive and the images to dance in our minds. Something that is unique in all your writes...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure ...You are welcome...:)

[MOON]

This is so deep yet such an elegant write. I keep thinking this is my favourite of Neva and you always come up with something more special. Lovely!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Moon :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A whole sense of being without the needed reliance on description thought, well done, good read.

[Temerity]

So I read your more recent work and was happy to find that your other pieces of writing are just as well-written and beautiful. You use your words so carefully, in a way that is natural without losing a sense of direction, and it truly makes your writing breathe. Some small moments of this just make it stand out in a way I don't completely understand. It's clear that you have been writing for many a year, and know how to thread words like one might learn to sew.

In any case, this was lovely, and thank you for posting.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is a work of art. I was most impressed by the way you distort our conventional ways of thinking. I feared the water and felt comfort in the darkness. Skills.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I felt that this was rather scenic yet harrowing in places, mesmerising language used, great, well done

[marie]

Before the door closes on my life's journey
I know the moon will rise
in all its angelic innocence
once again.
Until then, I will dream
of polishing those jewels,
spinning round
here......
insane.

great job!!:) that last stanza blew my mind it was amazing!:) this piece is lovely Neva:)

[Dream Weaver]

Wow Neva, how sadly beautiful this piece is...xo

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you DW :)

[realmwriter]

This is way awesome...! The metaphors leave you wandering through lasting still frames playing like a video in your head...!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Derek :)

[realmwriter]

Your welcome Neva...!

[rivers]

It is always so profoundly emotional to read your eloquent creative expressions. It just instantly takes me to a place few have ever been able to penetrate other than in my own moments of sighs too deep for words... Though mysteriously dark at times there is a comforting sense of stillness that I savor during the silence we share for a moment. Your poems many times seem to emerge from a dimension of thought far beyond mere mortal words.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Harlon :)

[IonaFaith]

Your words never fail to give me gooseflesh. You are such a powerful wordsmith and I have so much respect for you and your work.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Iona :)